Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/The Dragon

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

The Dragon

  • Nominated by: AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:41, January 25, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I wrote this one over a year ago, but I've updated the comic publication date citations among other changes.

(0 Inqs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 Inq vote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 1 Inq vote required to pass.)

Support

  1. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 23:46, February 4, 2017 (UTC)
  2. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:36, September 27, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • All three sub-sections of the biography could have relevant quotes. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:53, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
    • Couldn't find anything. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:02, July 3, 2017 (UTC)
      • You can move the current bio quote to Imperial retribution and then put Thanoth's quote in issue eleven about using the Dragon's data in legacy. You could also have Doowan's quote about his location in the section Dealing with Doctor Aphra, although if you think it isn't relevant enough that's fine. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:13, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
        • I don't have my TPB with me at college, so could you post those quotes on my talkpage, please? - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:20, September 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • Looking at it in the wikia skin, you could probably get at least one more image into the body of the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:53, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • Just realised you probably need to source the name Arquitens-class light cruiser to something else. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:46, September 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • Having just worked out the dating for the Leia comics, I'm not sure that you're dating reference has enough info, you're going to need to mention 0 ABY and the Galactic Atlas in there somewhere at the very least. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:46, September 26, 2017 (UTC)
    • Couldn't find anything concrete, so I've elected to just remove the date until some concocts a citation that can accurately date the comics using some obscure source I don't know about. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 00:23, September 27, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Preliminary objections: The article could definitely use another image, either in the Legacy or the PT.
  • The first sentence in the Bts reads awkwardly due to its two "that was" clauses. Please reword.
  • I definitely recommend you switch the Marvel backup links to IA instead of WebCite. The latter has horrible formatting and should only be used if IA cannot archive the page.
    • When I tried using IA on those Marvel comic pages, I just get back "Page cannot be displayed due to robots.txt" in responce. Looks like we'll have to keep using WebCite. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:45, October 17, 2017 (UTC)
      • [1] [2] Usually prefixing the URL in question with web.archive.org/web/ shows you a working version. 1358 (Talk) 19:49, October 17, 2017 (UTC)
        • Thanks for that! Replaced. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 20:28, October 17, 2017 (UTC)
  • 0 ABY is only mentioned in the intro. It definitely needs to go in the body, and at a quick glance, I wonder if it should be placed in the death field in the infobox as well.
    • Actually, I couldn’t find anything to substantiate that dating, so I’ve removed it. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 13:55, October 13, 2017 (UTC)
  • Check your image caption punctuation. 1358 (Talk) 12:04, October 13, 2017 (UTC)
    • Fixed. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 13:55, October 13, 2017 (UTC)
      • Keep in mind punctuation goes inside citation marks. I've fixed this for you.
  • What's the deal with the Inuse tag that's been up since January 22? I won't continue my review before it's gone. 1358 (Talk) 23:07, February 15, 2018 (UTC)
SE
  • "The individual known as "the Dragon" was a male Ortolan who operated as an arms dealer on Anthan Prime, a planet located on the edge of the galaxy's Outer Rim Territories, during the Galactic Civil War. " Can we get a timeframe here? Something to clarify around what time he was operating? Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:41, October 31, 2017 (UTC)
    • Unfortunately, after a certain point in the current run of post-ANH comics, we lose our the capacity to accurately date events. Please see above for more info. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:52, October 31, 2017 (UTC)
      • We do, however know the Galactic Civil War begain in 0 BBY, which gives helps us narrow things down a bit. We also know that this takes place after the Battle of Yavin. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:24, December 13, 2017 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Intro: Following the raid, Inspector Thanoth of the Galactic Empire came to the conclusion that the Dragon had supplied the attackers with explosives. They raided the Dragon's mansion... Who raided the mansion, the attackers or the Empire. The wording is unclear here.
  • Intro: he was silenced by Darth Vader Using the word "silenced" as a synonym for "killed" doesn't seem quite right IMO. You can silence someone without necessarily killing them (by bribing them, or threatening them, etc.). If he was killed, it should explicitly state so.
  • Biography: Context needed on Darth Vader upon first mention.
  • Contractions are not allowed in encyclopedic writing. Stuff like "they'd", "wasn't" needs to be changed
  • The reason as to why Vader was so keen on protecting Aphra's identity needs to be established QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:05, February 21, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Idle objections past two weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:02, March 7, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 20:02, March 7, 2018 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Furthermore my Inuse objection has been outstanding since February 15, with the tag up since like mid-January. 1358 (Talk) 20:03, March 7, 2018 (UTC)