Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tavion Axmis

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Tavion Axmis

(5 Inqs/5 Users/10 total)

Support

1. Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 10:11, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
2. Themelle444 18:22, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
3. Kylekatarn 09:30, 27 May 2007 (UTC)
4. Didn't find any problems. —Xwing328^(Talk) 23:19, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
5. Much better now. Creepy girl, though. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 15:50, 17 July 2007 (UTC)
   • She's goth. Can't you tell? Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 19:21, 19 July 2007 (UTC)
6. Greyman^(Paratus) 03:06, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
7. Good enough. If this doesn't work, try for GA, it will. Jediknight19bby ^{(Jedi High Council Chambers!)} 18:50, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
8. My-hyyyyy... Creeepy gir-hirrrrl... Won't you be my-he-hiiiine... Gonk ^(Gonk!) 17:13, 26 July 2007 (UTC)
9. Jedi Master Fiolli 16:18, 1 August 2007 (UTC)
10. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 23:31, 6 August 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

• It's an easy fix, but POVity POV POV POV. .... 21:07, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
  • Where?--Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 22:21, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
    • "Overconfident", "Deadly", "Swift", "Devious"... .... 22:32, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
      • I was able to address the ones you listed above, except for overconfidence. From both sides, it was clearly obvious that she was overconfident. I made it sound more neutral, and it was the best I could do. --Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 3:34, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
        • Mmkay, I've made some changes, but the prose is in need of a lot of work. A lot of sharp, short sentences that don't flow well. .... 03:59, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
          • Looks better now. I'll work on the sentences.--Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 4:11, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
            • The sentences are longer and I made sure they flowed better. Is it better now?--Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 4:36, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
              • Enough for me to strike my opposition. .... 00:56, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
• Remove the bullets in the BtS, thanks. QuentinGeorge 08:41, 11 April 2007 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 15:12, 13 April 2007 (UTC)
• Present tense needs corrected. Atarumaster88 21:20, 21 April 2007 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Darthchristian ^(Hey!) 22:40, 14 July 2007 (UTC)
• Get rid of the ref tags in the intro. The source given for "Originally an Empire Youth under Lord Hethrir" is Jedi Outcast which I'm pretty sure is wrong. Speculating about her being from Dathomir in BTS is fine, but I'd like to see it removed from the infobox. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 09:46, 28 June 2007 (UTC)
  • Fixed --Eyrezer 09:52, 28 June 2007 (UTC)
• Can somebody check the source for the first paragraph of cult leader? I can find no mention of any of it in Dark Forces Saga 6. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 11:53, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
  • I'm checking in Star Wars: Jedi Knight: Jedi Academy to help on this. Jedi Master Fiolli 16:18, 1 August 2007 (UTC)
    • I've changed the source; the entire paragraph is from JA. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 01:00, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
• Eyebrow-raising prose issues. An abundance of short choppy sentences. "Tavion this. Tavion that. Tavion with three bags full." "threw it at the ceiling and brought the weakened ceiling down..." Sorry, this just isn't good enough. Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, 7 August 2007 (UTC)
  • I don't know much about Tavion, but I may know a thing or two about prose. While the article still isn't *perfect*, see if the prose issues aren't a little less deadly now. jSarek 03:50, 19 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Better. Thefourdotelipsis 23:31, 23 August 2007 (UTC)

Comments

• Needs a general copyedit. Atarumaster88 21:21, 21 April 2007 (UTC)
  • REQUEST: This nom is inactive and should be removed by the Inquisitorius. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:32, 27 June 2007 (UTC)
    • Eyrezer just made it active again by fixing one of the objections... - breathesgelatin^Talk 22:38, 8 July 2007 (UTC)