Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tav Kennede

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Tav Kennede

  • Nominated by: Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 04:13, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Kennede's been shot!

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Excellent. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 15:44, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Imperialles 20:29, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 23:12, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Interesting.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:08, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Elephant. I still think the intro could be smushed though. Thefourdotelipsis 05:55, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Very well done. Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:22, June 24, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Very nice. A good read. VadersFist666 21:16, June 25, 2010 (UTC)

Object

L'Imperialles
  • Early life and service to Kir Kanos: "After the death of Emperor Palpatine's final clone on Onderon in 11 ABY, Kennede's father and the Royal Guardsmen who survived the destruction of Palpatine's throneworld, Byss, among other recent catastrophes, gathered on Yinchorr to mourn the passing of their Emperor." Bit unwieldy sentence.
    • Reworded.
  • Early life and service to Kir Kanos: "Kennede complied but, never having been to Baramorra, asked Kanos how he could find him. Kanos told him to look for a bounty hunter named Kenix Kil" Bit too detailed, here. I realize the alias thing is necessary for the next few sentences, but there should be a way of phrasing it without going into detail on the conversation.
    • Truncated slightly.
  • Spying on Mirith Sinn: "After Grappa gave Sinn over to the Zanibar, a species allied with the Hutt" The entire species was allied with Grappa?
    • That's the sense I got from the comic. I double-checked their entry in the Handbook, which seems to confirm this: "The Zanibar, natives of the planet Xo, were allied with Grappa the Hutt…" I've altered the sourcing accordingly.
  • Context-y in places, though I can see what you mean. Let's just say that I'm not particularly keen on reading CE after reviewing this article… Well written regardless. --Imperialles 20:00, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • Needless to say, I'm rather sick of the series after writing this article. =P Thanks for the review. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 20:28, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum
  • "In the wake of Palpatine's final death, Kennede understood that the Empire had grown corrupt was no longer the same authority that his father or Kanos had once served." Missing word here?
    • D'oh. Fixed.
  • And that is all. Very clean and well-written. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:42, June 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 12:41, June 26, 2010 (UTC)

  • I realize the intro may be a bit large, but given the convoluted nature of CEII's plot, a ton of context is required to make any sense out it. Same goes for the rest of the article as well. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 04:13, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • This is merely a question, since I've never read Crimson Empire and our articles seem to be sorta unclear. So the Baron was his real daughter back? What happened to the clone? Did she join him too? Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:22, June 24, 2010 (UTC)
      • The clone is present with the real Feena on the Baron's flagship at the end of the series, so it looks like she did join him. They don't make it clear what happens afterward though. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 18:28, June 25, 2010 (UTC)