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TX-828

  • Nominated by: Cwedin(talk) 05:09, January 19, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

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Support

  1. Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (Talk) 19:14, March 7, 2017 (UTC)
  2. I like the see also section, something more articles should use. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:18, April 25, 2017 (UTC)
  3. I agree. JS-4422 (talk) 10:42, April 25, 2017 (UTC)
  4. Great stuff --Lewisr (talk) 17:28, July 30, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 00:45, March 3, 2018 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Very nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:50, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:42, March 24, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • Could you be slightly less vague in the last sentence of the intro? Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:05, January 19, 2017 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • Personally I'd say that the Rodian rebel deserves an article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:05, January 19, 2017 (UTC)
  • Will return to finish review later. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:05, January 19, 2017 (UTC)
    • Sorry for the slow reply, I'd some how failed to follow the page and see you'd responded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:38, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • You have 0 BBY and 0 ABY referenced to Smuggler's Run in the body, but I'm assuming an explanatory reference will be needed, at least for the former? Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:38, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • A note for 0 ABY isn't really needed, but I've added a brief explanation for 0 BBY. - Cwedin(talk) 20:23, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
      • The note explains both well, but I'd just add a mention of Galactic Atlas in since the dating system isn't used in the novel. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:34, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • This is almost certainly going to need an update for Han and the Rebel Rescue. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:38, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • I'm counting on it. I'll update the article with any new information. - Cwedin(talk) 20:23, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
      • Just wanted to make sure you were aware. Weirdly Amazon claims they're going to deliver it to me tomorrow despite it not coming out till May. I assume this is an error, but I'll let you know what needs doing if it does show up early. Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:34, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
Imp-828
  • The Disney citation and the refs using {{WebCite}} all need backup links.
    • I've added backups, but the art portfolio link doesn't seem to produce any images. (Might just be my internet connection, though.)
      • Doesn't seem to work for me, either. Imperators II(Talk) 07:29, October 7, 2017 (UTC)
        • Weird, now it works for me...
  • Did the Empire breed clones on Kamino in Canon? I'm asking this because there's a possibility Torrent was never affiliated with the Republic at all.
    • AFAIK, no canon content has stated that the Empire continued clone production.
      • Still haven't found anything, but I'm keeping my eyes peeled.
  • There should be a category reflecting TX-828 Republic affiliation. Imperators II(Talk) 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • Since Torrent isn't mentioned in the DB clone trooper entry, you'll have to expand that ref into a manual note explaining how the info presented there is connected to Torrent. Imperators II(Talk) 07:29, October 7, 2017 (UTC)
    • Done. - Cwedin(talk) 01:21, October 13, 2017 (UTC)
      • "Jango Fett, who had brown eyes, tan skin, and stood at a height of 1.83 meters" — according to what source? The DB clone trooper entry doesn't say that. Imperators II(Talk) 18:16, October 13, 2017 (UTC)
        • Sorry, I just worded that funny. Should be good now. - Cwedin(talk) 01:29, October 25, 2017 (UTC)
  • "TX-828 and Alecia Beck interrogate patrons on Cyrkon." — this image caption should either specify what establishment the individuals were patrons of or replace "patrons" with a different word. Imperators II(Talk) 12:26, October 27, 2017 (UTC)
    • Changed patrons to civilians. - Cwedin(talk) 03:28, November 6, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Some preliminary objections before I dive in. The page is currently in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. I suspect the reference with {{Databank}} is the cause. Please pass |archivedate= to the template and make sure you get a working timestamp. StarWars.com has been a bit wonky when it comes to IA lately.
    • I added the archivedate, but the hidden category is still there. Should I try another backup site?
      • Sorry, my bad: This particular template doesn't have an archivedate parameter; it needs the entire URL. I've fixed it for you. 1358 (Talk) 23:26, February 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • It feels unnecessary to list every suborganization of the Empire in the infobox affiliation field. Just go with the Empire and the Stormtrooper Corps under it.
    • Completely agree.
  • The intro feels just a tad too long for an article of this length. See if there's some detail you can cut.
    • How's it look now?
  • Ok, what's the deal with the See also section? Very rarely is a See also section appropriate, and on a quick glance I'm not sure it is. Convince me otherwise. 1358 (Talk) 02:05, February 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • In canon, only a handful of clones have a military career in the Empire. Listing them in the Bio or BTS doesn't seem worthwhile, hence the See also section. I'm not set on keeping the section, but I find it useful for navigation. - Cwedin(talk) 21:20, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
      • Good reasoning. I concede. 1358 (Talk) 23:26, February 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • While it's fine to assume some things about clones (i.e. their length), I don't think there's any need to speculate about their eye and skin color. You never know what kind of stuff they've done to their body (just like some clones dye their hair). I checked a bunch of clone trooper FAs and they don't list eye or skin color unless it's explicitly mentioned or showed in the source material.
    • Good point.
  • "In an attempt to recapture the Rebels, TX-828 and Beck returned to the Star Destroyer Vehement, but the Millennium Falcon escaped into hyperspace." I feel like some elaboration is needed here. Simply returning to a Star Destroyer generally doesn't imply an attempt to recapture rebels. Did they chase the Rebels in the ship or what?
    • Fixed.
  • "The pair quickly stunned a Kubaz fighter, as a second team followed TX-828's order, bringing down a Gran." I'm not sure what exactly this sentence is trying to say. Was the pair a second team? Please rewrite.
    • Done.
  • "TX-828 followed the four bounty hunters to a yacht/cantina named Miss Fortune" I'm not really keen on the slash usage in prose. Just go with something like "to a cantina aboard the yacht Miss Fortune".
    • Done.
  • "The ship lifted off, destined to arrive at the Vehement." This sentence feels a bit detached. See if you can rework it for a better flow.
    • Done.
  • "and discreetly killed the Gran and human bounty hunters during their fight with the Rebels." This feels completely disconnected with the first part of a sentence, which describes his skills with vehicles. 1358 (Talk) 00:03, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Some intro/preliminary objections.
    • I notice on the Alecia Beck page that her rank eventually becomes senior commander. I'm not sure the timing of this, but you should incorporate this into the intro if germane, at least as a pipelink.
      • Done.
    • The article consistently capitalizes the term "Rebel" throughout. Regardless of whether or not the original source does so as well, Canon has taken to not capitalizing the term in the vast majority of cases (practically 100%), so this article should follow suit and de-capitalize. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:48, March 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Article for the Motok cantina? Seems like there's enough significant information there.
    • Sure. I'll get a page whipped up.
  • Should this not be on "sight"? "Beck stated that all rebel sympathizers were to be shot on site"
    • Definitely should be sight.
  • In the BTS, I think you should remove the sentence mentioning that Marc Thompson voiced the character. Since it's just a narration as opposed to an audio dramatization, Thompson voices all the characters in the book, so it's not specialized information.
    • Fair enough.
  • What is the purpose of listing those four clones in a See also section? I don't see any particularly critical connection between them and this article subject. If it's just because they're all clone stormtroopers, that's why we have the category link at the bottom of the page. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:12, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
    • The clone stormtroopers category isn't exclusively Fett clones, so I find the list somewhat helpful. I'd be fine with removing it, though. The list would undoubtedly need constant updating and may grow irrelevant. - Cwedin(talk) 05:05, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • If there are non-Fett clone stormtroopers, I don't think it would be a bad idea to further subdivide Category:Clone stormtroopers into something like Category:Non-Jango Fett clone stormtroopers, which I think eliminates the need for this See also. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:42, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • I probably missed a few pages, but I've made the category and taken out the See also. - Cwedin(talk) 03:26, March 22, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:42, March 24, 2018 (UTC)

  • Would it be better to say "TX-828" or "Torrent" throughout the article? The book calls him TX-828 in the first half and Torrent in the latter. - Cwedin(talk) 01:21, October 13, 2017 (UTC)