Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/TIE Phantom

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TIE Phantom

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:18, 5 July 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: No ship that small has a cloaking device.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Welcome to the opening performance of The Phantom of the TIE Opera!--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 22:52, 5 July 2008 (UTC)
  2. Sweet lord this was a good read! Harrar 16:49, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 06:09, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote GT's noms generally make me happy. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 18:02, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Graestan(Talk) 14:24, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Clean as a whistle, and an informative, interesting read. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:25, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Excellent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:46, 18 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. Given the length of the article, could it be possible to flesh out the intro just a bit more?--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 22:42, 5 July 2008 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • Multiple sources indicate the Alliance did not win at Hoth. Please correct. (intro)
      • The Rebels were the guy in black and the wrinkly old dude right? ;) Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • "along with the necessary controls." Little more context/detail at the end would be lovely just for readibility's sake.
      • Reworded slightly. But I can't really elaborate on the controls since we don't actually get to see them. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • "The technology in the TIE Phantom could have proved a threat" Reword this so it's not so POVish . . something like it was considered a threat would be better.
      • Done. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • Link to starfighter combat somewhere in there.
      • Already linked. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • "Batch's low profile, resulting from his reluctance to engage in Imperial Court politics, made him an ideal candidate to lead the secret development project." Reword this, a bit of POV here as well.
      • Done. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • You'll need a link/article for beam focusers.
      • Redlinked. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:57, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
    • Nice topic, nice article overall. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 04:00, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. Toprawa:
    • I'd like to see this sentence reworded a little, for a few reasons. It starts off with identical wording to the preceding sentence, and the dual use "facility...facility" and "factory...factory" becomes a bit redundant to read: "When Murleen realized how many more of the fighters were inside the facility, she took the stolen fighter into the facility and the Rebels destroyed its reactor core as well, destroying the factory, along with the remaining TIE Phantoms.
    • Can we get a brief description for what this project involved? "the hibridium technology that preceded it continued to be developed as part of the Vorknkx Project" Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:22, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
    • Otherwise, excellent. Reading your noms is always a painless and enjoyable endeavor. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:22, 18 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:46, 18 July 2008 (UTC)