Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Star Map

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Star Map

(5 Inqs/5 Users/10 Total)

Support

  1. As nominator. Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:23, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. Nice job, Fiolli. Good idea for a nom. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:39, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote I give this one the Campanelle of Originality. Graestan(Talk) 03:07, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
  4. Very nice, Fiolli. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:34, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Greyman(Paratus) 14:47, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
  6. Yeah why not. :-) Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 12:03, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
  7. Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:58, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote --Imperialles 22:16, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
  9. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:13, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
  10. Inqvote And I give it the Capellini of Cartography. Gonk (Gonk!) 01:00, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
  11. Inqvote A cannoli on me for dessert to go with that pasta. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 04:38, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. Toprawa says:
    • I would move the description of what the Star Forge is from the "Infinite Empire" section to its initial mention here: "the Maps pointed to the location of the Star Forge."
    • Not sure what you're trying to say here, but if it's "It is also unknown if they had any other function," I would take this sentence out: "It is also known if they had any other function."
    • If we know how tall Revan is, say approximately whatever his height is: "that stood approximately the height of Revan upon his visits"
    • I've never played the game, so unless there are solid indicators that suggest more did exist, I would remove this speculation: "though it is possible that more may have existed."
    • Remove parenthetical prose. If it's important enough to be put into the article, include it: "visiting the Star Maps on Dantooine, Kashyyyk, Korriban (at least twice)"
      • Addressed.
    • I don't think "unaccessed" is a word: "but too remained unaccessed."
    • This sentence is a bit confusing. Was the obelisk a room? "Rakatan-style monuments could be found in a couple of the rooms, such as the obelisk"
    • There are a lot of sentences that supply speculative information. Again, not having played the game, I'm not sure how "factual" this speculation is. Make sure none of it falls too far into the OR category.
    • Add a sentence to the BTS that names the KOTOR game as its first appearance. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:57, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. Make sure some information from all listed appearances and sources is presented and cited within the article. Graestan(Talk) 02:10, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
  3. All the images in the article (except for the infobox pic) are fairly low quality; get someone to reshoot them (with low compression). --Imperialles 22:13, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
  4. From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
    • "During the Jedi Civil War, Revan was captured and suffered from amnesia. In order to combat the continued expansion of the Sith Empire, Revan was charged with once again completing the quest of accessing each Star Map, piecing together information so that the Star Forge could be destroyed." I suggest adding a few words about how he was redeemed.
    • In Mandalorian Wars:" As a result, some information returned to each map allowing only a limited amount of information to be accessed." Please rephrase this.
    • Same section:" On others, such as Korriban, the Map had to be found in the Tomb of Naga Sadow with its own ancient defenses." Again, rephrase.
    • Next paragraph:"ruins on Dantooine were investigated by the Jedi Nemo during the period of Revan's retraining." I recommend changing "Revan's retraining" to something else. Maybe a date, or "during the Jedi Civil War".
    • Interesting idea for an FA. Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:58, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
  5. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "The Star Forge was considered the greatest achievement of the Rakata, but it was highly corruptible." Please clarify or remove the sentence. Right now it is rather vague.
    • "The first Star Map was found on Dantooine in the ancient ruins located not far from the Jedi Enclave. Following the Mandalorian Wars," Is it canonical that the Dantooine Map was the first, or is it just an unclear reference?
      • In the vision to Revan of his former self and Malak finding the Dantooine map, it is implied that this is the first one they discovered. However, added "one of" to the beginning of that sentence.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 01:46, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
    • Definitely needs LS template if you're going to say that the shark wasn't killed.
    • Do any comments imply that those aren't the only five maps? Because if not, then saying it's possible for more to exist is essentially speculation. Please clarify if that is the case.
    • Some of the phrasing is a mite repetitive. "unknown in the broader galaxy" for one example. Or "begun to self-repair." Not necessarily bad, but not the kind of prose one might expect in an FA.
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 01:14, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 20:47, 6 February 2008 (UTC)