Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Song of War

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Song of War

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 11:48, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another would-be GAN that got too large :(

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:14, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 17:00, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 05:34, June 28, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:41, June 28, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:19, July 2, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:23, July 17, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • The place for the earliest sighting is missing. So is the last sighting.
    • There.
  • Maybe mention that Zsinj is an Imperial in the intro/body?
    • Zsinj is a warlord at this point, and only a formal Imperial, so calling him such would be incorrect.
  • The "Battle of Fondor" article reads like this title is not conjectural. Is that correct? If yes, then the actual name should be used.
    • There.
  • A little bit context for Olanji/Charubah please.
    • Added.
  • You mention at least one X-wing in the infobox and at least two in the body.
    • The complement containes at least one X-wing, while the ship can hold at least two in addition to its other fighters. This is because Luke brought his X-wing along, but had to fly one of Isolder's.
  • Is there a place for an image of Isolder?
    • That work?
  • Maybe mention that the journey would have taken ten days without Jedi-navigation in the description.
    • There
  • Is there another quote for the history section, so that you can move the current quote to the C&C section?
    • No quote. :P
  • The Song of War first appeared in 1994's novel The Courtship of Princess Leia, written by Dave Wolverton. The Battle Dragon later appeared in: Could you change one?
    • Better?
  • Very nice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:07, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 13:10, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • Like on other Battle Dragons, the guns of the Song of War could rotate around the edge of the saucers, allowing recharging guns to move out of optimal position and thus allow fresh guns into those in order to maintain a steady rate of fire. - I understand the gist of what's being said here, but I think you might be missing a few words.
    • There.
  • behind the fleet of other Battle Dragons that Isolder's mother Ta'a Chume would soon go after Solo with. - some clunky phrasing here, please rewrite for clarity.
    • Better?
  • However, Astarta chose a different path; he took the Song of War - I though Astarta was female? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:30, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • Missing an s, added. Thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 21:17, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
Lee's second attack
  • I'm terribly sorry for this post-support-objection but after reading the book again, I recognized the following thing. Luke had managed to pilot them to Dathomir in seven days, saving ten days from the shortest route that the Hapan astrogation computers could devise!: Does this mean the journey would have taken 7+10 days without a Jedi? The article says 7 with and 10 without. Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:54, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
    • Whoops, misread it. Thanks for pointing that out - fixed. 501st dogma(talk) 13:30, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • Any possible quote for the Description section?
    • Nope, there's a lack quotes dealing with the ship.
  • "Not willing to let Solo waltz off" "Waltz" seems kinda colloquial here.
    • Killed the waltz.
  • I'd really like a little more context on Zsinj. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:27, June 24, 2014 (UTC)
    • Does that work? Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 11:52, June 24, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The infobox states that the ship carried at least one X-wing, but the Description section says two. Which is it? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 07:08, June 28, 2014 (UTC)
    • Well, one of the X-wings mentioned in the body belonged to Skywalker, so it was not part of the ship's complement. However, the ship still had room enough to house Skywalker's extra fighter. 501st dogma(talk) 11:25, June 28, 2014 (UTC)
      • Ok, I understand what you're saying now that you've explained it, but you still have a certain discrepancy in information between the body and the infobox that will not be readily clarified for the reader. I don't even know how to tell you to potentially fix this, but you should find a way to make both pieces of information match. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:25, June 28, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:28, July 17, 2014 (UTC)

  • Thanks to MJ for the copyedit. 501st dogma(talk) 11:48, April 6, 2014 (UTC)