- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Reduxed Featured article. The result of the discussion was Featured article status lost. Please do not modify the page.
Slick (redux review)
- Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ 96.
- Date added: October 23, 2018
- Changes since last review: diff
(0 Inqs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support
Object
Imp
- Ref 1 needs to explain how the information from the entry that apparently doesn't mention Slick apply to him. Imperators II(Talk) 15:08, November 10, 2018 (UTC)
- Does that work?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 21:14, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
- First person pronouns should not be used. Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed.--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 23:55, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
- You fixed the one pronoun which was fine. I meant the "we" and "us." Imperators II(Talk) 23:59, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
- Now it is fixed.--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 00:04, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- The reference not should also explicitly mention what information regarding the clone troopers the Databank entry provides. See this reference note for example. Imperators II(Talk) 00:08, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 00:27, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 22:38, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- No. Your previous attempt at writing up the reference note was rather poorly worded and somewhere along the way got reverted. Please take a careful look at how such a note is worded in the example I gave you above before attempting to write it up again. Imperators II(Talk) 22:55, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 22:38, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 00:27, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- The reference not should also explicitly mention what information regarding the clone troopers the Databank entry provides. See this reference note for example. Imperators II(Talk) 00:08, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- Now it is fixed.--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 00:04, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- You fixed the one pronoun which was fine. I meant the "we" and "us." Imperators II(Talk) 23:59, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed.--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 23:55, December 17, 2018 (UTC)
- First person pronouns should not be used. Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
- Does that work?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 21:14, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
Refs 8 and 9 are identical.Imperators II(Talk) 15:08, November 10, 2018 (UTC)- Fixed.--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 21:19, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
Why isn't what's currently in refs 6 and 10 listed under Sources?Imperators II(Talk) 15:08, November 10, 2018 (UTC)- What's the problem?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 21:27, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
- For some reason, what's currently in refs 6 and 9 is not listed under Sources, which should be fixed. Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 6 (the featurette) is part of the newer episode guide, whilst ref 10 (now 9 I guess, the Rex and Cody thing) is part of the older guide, I assume that's why they weren't listed before. Should they still be added under the sources? --Lewisr (talk) 19:34, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 00:14, December 18, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 22:38, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for pointing that out, Lewis. Imperators II(Talk) 22:55, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- Fixed?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 22:38, December 26, 2018 (UTC)
- For some reason, what's currently in refs 6 and 9 is not listed under Sources, which should be fixed. Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
- What's the problem?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 21:27, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
- Ref 1 is missing some context.
- The last part of the sentence makes it sound that all clones were created during the Clone Wars. While in fact most of them, including Slick were created prior to the conflict. Slick became a Clone Sergeant and was deployed into service during the Clone Wars,[2] the conflict between the Galactic Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems in which the clones were created to fight.
- Since the narrative should be structured chronologically, this sentence needs to be moved after the mention of Battle of Geonosis. Slick also eventually led a group of fellow clones that included the troopers Chopper, Gus, Jester, Punch, and Sketch, and he considered his clones the best of the Grand Army of the Republic.
- Also, "led a group" requires some sort of elaboration. When did he lead them? Where? If those details are not known, this needs to be changed to a more ambiguous wording.
- Some of the image captions in the article are written in the present tense. Others, in the past. Please stick with one, for consistency.
- "Hidden Enemy"'s air date can be sourced to the same source as the rest of the sentence. This renders ref 8 unnecessary at this point.
- I think that the Bts can mention the origin of his nickname within the "Legends" continuity.
- "Before the Battle of Christophsis" can be further narrowed down, per bio. Before the Battle of Christophsis, Slick came to harbor a resentment toward the Jedi Order,
- An equipment section can be put together, discussing such things as his clone armor and his utility belt.
- There's some unique info within the Dark Disciple mention, which is absent from the article. QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 14:30, February 8, 2019 (UTC)
Comments
Should the line about Slick (that does not mention his name) from Brain Invaders be mentioned?--Afilmfanforlife (talk) 02:21, December 4, 2018 (UTC)
Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)
Imperators' remaining objection from December 26, 2018 was never responded to. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:14, February 21, 2019 (UTC)- Exiled Jedi (talk) 01:15, February 21, 2019 (UTC)
Imperators II(Talk) 10:19, February 21, 2019 (UTC)