- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Simus
(6 Inqs/3 Users/9 Total)
Support
- -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 12:25, 29 September 2007 (UTC)
Crazy dude. Can survive decapitation, but can't hack blaster fire? Bah! Thefourdotelipsis 01:29, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
—Xwing328(Talk) 21:11, 4 October 2007 (UTC)
Greyman(Paratus) 00:52, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
WP:TOTJ chugs away... Graestan (This party's over) 01:21, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- Very good. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:01, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
This'll be heading for the queue in no time. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:30, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
Imperialles 14:16, 9 October 2007 (UTC)- Sorry I was late on the objections. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 00:10, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
Oppose
Just one thing: "...Sith servant, armed to the teeth" from the "Duel with Marka Ragnos". Does this simply mean his whole body was covered in weapons (like a Mandalorian's armor)? if so, please rephrase it. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:08, 6 October 2007 (UTC)- Well no, it's meant to be a figure of speech. Anyway, I clarified it -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 18:17, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
- From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
Weak first sentence. Give it a little more juice.- Addressed.
"Special jar" is silly, in my opinion.- Addressed.
Intersperse the "Simus"es and "he/him"s with some more innovative mentions.- Addressed.
More quotes, please. Just one or two are needed.- Done.
"Heavily armed with several Sith weapons" is mildly contradictory and redundant at the same time. Congratulations; please reword. Heck, I think "massive, heavily armed Sith servant" is best.- Addressed.
Sorry to get image-wonky, but could you have better versions uploaded of some of the images? I know a person or two with great scanning abilities as well as mint-condition copies of the comics.- I've asked JMAS to re-upload them.
- —Graestan
(This party's over) 01:46, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments and input -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 09:42, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
- From the lair of Hobbes15
Simus wasn't a headless male (1.2)— he was a bodyless one. Reword this a little.- Addressed.
Did Sadow kill Simus's slave as well when he shot at them? Clarify this.- Clarified.
- That's all. Severed head, huh. That's new. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 00:34, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- From the fjord of Imperialles:
File:Simuss.jpg—would it be possible to get a better scan of this? It currently has some sort of odd distortion.File:Simus2.jpg needs to be rescanned, this time without .jpg artifacts.Introduction: "…he used his ancient Sith powers to preserve his life." "Ancient" is POV. Reword.- Addressed.
1.1: The above applies to the sentence "Using ancient Sith techniques…" as well.- Addressed.
1.1: "…gruesome, dismembered head." "Gruesome" is POV—reword.- Addressed.
1.3: "Simus's former apprentice responded angrily, banging the table with his gauntleted hands." A bit too flowery.- Addressed.
BTS: Perhaps a short mention of how Simus changed from his preliminary design, if only to give context to the image.- Addressed.
- --Imperialles 00:35, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments and input -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 12:20, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
Comments
- I apologize for all the Tales of the Jedi nominations (there's still more to come), though this one is vastly different from any of the others. An interesting character from an interesting story. -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 12:25, 29 September 2007 (UTC)
- Try not to go semi-colon or em dash crazy when writing articles. The grammar was my only original complaint. —Xwing328(Talk) 21:11, 4 October 2007 (UTC)
- Should the P&T be before the P&A? Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 15:05, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
- Done -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 16:39, 7 October 2007 (UTC)