- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Shollan
- Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 16:57, 3 April 2023 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Quite tragic.
- Date Archived: 18:09, 4 June 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 1157 words (186 introduction, 751 body, 220 behind the scenes)
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LucaRoR 
(Talk) 13:34, 16 May 2023 (UTC)- Assuming Braha's objections are handled.—spookywillowwtalk 17:10, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
They were handled… Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 19:56, 1 June 2023 (UTC)- No confirmed death..yet Lewisr (talk) 20:08, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
- The BtS photo reminds me of the tons of cut scenes on Yavin that LF and Disney have sealed away somewhere Fan26 (Talk) 20:47, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
- NotBoop (talk) 17:19, 4 June 2023 (UTC)
- Nice work. UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:54, 4 June 2023 (UTC)
Object
Luca
Missing dates for the accompanying reference books.- Done.
Star Wars: Timelines dates the events of Rogue One to 1 BBY. You may want to give a look at this SH and possibly update the article with the newer dates.- Done.
Some context for Jyn Erso would be nice in the body. I know that "rescued" kind of implies she's with them, but I'd like to see it explicated.- Sure, added.
"Nonetheless, Erso, along with many other rebels Erso commandeered a Zeta-class Heavy Cargo Shuttle that they had stolen from the Empire …" This sentence doesn't sound right: maybe the second "Erso" shouldn't be there.- A result of someone making a bunch of changes without reaching out, fixed.
Always in the same paragraph, you mention Rogue One (seemingly for the first time) without a link or context.- Another thing that was added - gone now.
- (Review note) Please, make sure to be ok with my copy-edit. LucaRoR (Talk) 17:36, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 19:29, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
There is inconsistent referencing for the skin color between the infobox and the body.Male is also referenced inconsistently between the body and the infobox. Also, it would be nice to have consistent referencing when you mention his pronouns for the first time in the body.LucaRoR (Talk) 09:02, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
- Both done. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:23, 7 May 2023 (UTC)
Braha
Think it's worth finding a way to link SW-0608, even if it's just pipelinking to the shuttle class. Same goes for Lightmaker.- Added.
- That now makes it look like Rogue One is still all inside the shuttle when the rebel fleet drops in. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:56, 25 May 2023 (UTC)
- Hmm that's true. I'm not sure how else to link it without it being too forced, and honestly it's not that vital that it's there.
- My personal approach is to give the individual vessel priority of linking over the model. Thoughts? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:33, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
- If that's the precedent then fine by me. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:41, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
- My personal approach is to give the individual vessel priority of linking over the model. Thoughts? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:33, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
- Hmm that's true. I'm not sure how else to link it without it being too forced, and honestly it's not that vital that it's there.
- That now makes it look like Rogue One is still all inside the shuttle when the rebel fleet drops in. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:56, 25 May 2023 (UTC)
- Added.
"However, Shollan reported that that information was unknown and that they had tried to raise the rebels there, but all rebel frequencies were blocked, and communications were jammed by the Shield Gate." This one's a bit of a run on. Can you bisect?Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:21, 19 May 2023 (UTC)- Well, it was grammatically correct, if a bit long :P split. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:28, 22 May 2023 (UTC)
Not sure about the ordering of things you mention in the BtS. Particularly, you go into production info after the first reveal of Shollan and before the Rogue One releases, when the production was most likely taking place before the reveal, making the continuity of that a bit messy. Can you revise in whatever way? I usually list production stuff after the first reveal & IDed stuff.Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:56, 25 May 2023 (UTC)- Reorganized it - I like having production stuff connected to the film itself in this case, but you're right that having the SW.com article mentioned in between makes sense to move. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:03, 28 May 2023 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:07, 4 June 2023 (UTC)