- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Shandy Fanaso
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 10:42, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Great character from Jason Fry's new short story (go read it.) Might be a tad rusty, since I haven't done one of these for a while.
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Support
Impressive job getting all this info out of what seems to be a very simple (and kinda boring) story. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:43, 27 August 2008 (UTC)- Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:39, 5 September 2008 (UTC)
- You are rusty. :P Cull Tremayne 03:22, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
Good read. —Xwing328(Talk) 01:08, 13 October 2008 (UTC)- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:26, 13 October 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Brown Computer Desk of Chack Jadson:
I think you should move all the One Two Many stuff to the end of the intro, rather than having a bit in the first sentence. At least I think they could be tied together better. (Sorry I'm not very specific here).- This is more of a style thing for me, I suppose, in that I feel the opening of the intro should always state what the character was "most recently", if you understand what I mean.
- I understand the sentiment. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:43, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
- This is more of a style thing for me, I suppose, in that I feel the opening of the intro should always state what the character was "most recently", if you understand what I mean.
Cargo-tithe or cargo tithe?- Cargo-tithe. Fixed.
- Sorry I'm being a bit picky here; these are very minor things that stood out when I read this. Also note that if you disagree with one or more of these, please tell me. Like I said, these are minor things. It's an execllent article overall. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:27, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. On the first point, if you think it's genuinely too disruptive, I'm more than happy to change it. :) Thefourdotelipsis 23:45, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
Shouldn't devotion-service be linked? Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:45, 4 September 2008 (UTC)- Yes. (Red)linked. :P Thefourdotelipsis 06:59, 5 September 2008 (UTC)
Comments
- I added a pic - it is from the ad for the story on the StarWars site... I think it safe to put it there. --Eyrezer 07:56, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:59, 13 October 2008 (UTC)