- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Shadowspawn
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 10:06, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I'm certifiable! :D
(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)
Support
He's a madman, I say! - Lord Hydronium 10:32, 8 June 2008 (UTC)- This page is going to be a rampage in October. Darthchristian 17:50, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 11:55, 13 June 2008 (UTC) - December?! >:( -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:54, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
Who came up with that silly name anyway? Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 18:07, 21 June 2008 (UTC)- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 20:42, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
- This article has an interesting newsworthiness to it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:31, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 20:37, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- Oh boy.....
"The first death of Emperor Palpatine allowed Shadowspawn to return from exile and put his plans into motion." The sentence just seems to come out of nowhere, making the paragraph seem choppy, and also doing nothing to lead the biography into the next section. Try, "After Emperor Palpatine's first death, Shadowspawn was able to return from exile and put his plans into motion."- Fixed.
Can you try to elaborate on the mass suicides of the royal guards? Because I had never known them to commit suicide after Palpatine's death right, and its just confusing.- I don't think we know anything more about that, I'm just going by Evil Never Dies.
No source explains how Mindor was strategically important? If there is, please explain how it was important.- We'll find out in October. :P
Also, can you add that he was able to create an army of shadow stormtroopers? You just jump right ahead and say that Shadowspawn deployed his shdowtroopers without explaining a thing about them.- Ditto here. We don't really know the context of Shadowspawn's use of the guards, nor do we know if he created them, or took from from Blackhole, etc. So, again...October.
- Other than that, it was a fantastic article, Fourdot. Darthchristian 02:38, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
- Thank you. Thefourdotelipsis 08:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
A few more words on the last sentence of the intro would be lovely.- Few more in there.
You might know better than me, but the last sentence of the BTS-should it be Eastern and Western culture?- I know nuzzink. So I'll go with you on this one.
I hate to nitpick, but in the latest illustration, his eyes aren't red. In the NEC drawing, given his stance, it seems more likely to me that the red tones are created by the lightsaber reflection of his pupils and TLE's taking liberties with it. At any rate, Dave Seeley's drawing clearly doesn't show red eyes.- Ah, of course. Something I forgot in my de-TLEing. Thefourdotelipsis 01:44, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 15:31, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
- Toprawa:
If the source doesn't say this, please remove the "unknown" phrasing: "was banished to the Outer Rim Territories for unknown reasons."- Gone.
"The bravery of his foes" is POV: "he had underestimated the bravery and resourcefulness of his foes"- Fixed.
I think you mean "Edwards" here? :P "Working from Tommy Lee Jones' original artwork from The New Essential Chronology"- I wish. How embarassing...fixed.
- Very interesting. Good BTS. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:39, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Thought you'd like the BTS. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 23:35, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:22, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, I'll get the info when the book comes out. You have no idea how excited I am for his book. No. Idea. Also, if you're thinking "Hey, I just read this" if you just read Atha, well...my thoughts exactly. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 10:06, 30 May 2008 (UTC)