Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Serroco

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Serroco

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 05:45, March 23, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Would you like to say something before you leave? Perhaps you'd care to state exactly how you feel.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. New York, Rio, Serroco. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:11, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
2. ^Jorrel_Fraajic 03:16, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
3. Why fight when you can NUKE em. 501st dogma^(talk) 18:16, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:16, June 3, 2014 (UTC)
5. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 16:39, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
6. Cade Calrayn 19:19, June 29, 2014 (UTC)
7. <-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 23:56, June 29, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• History: Human settlers from the Republic had put down roots on one of Serroco's nicer continents: Is nicer a proper way to describe it? Forgive me, if it is.
  • Carth Onasi says "nicer" in the comic, so I just went with that.
• History: Link for the watch station and the Senator?
  • Redlinked, will create shortly.
• History: Just a suggestion: Could you add dates to explain when the Jedi Civil War and the Cold War?
  • I didn't want to overload with dates, but I added some relevant time context.
• An easy and entertaining read. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:35, April 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 02:36, April 7, 2014 (UTC)

Jorrel

• First 4 sentences in the intro start with "Serraco". Maybe vary the sentences a bit?
  • Varied.
• Intro: Admiral Saul Karath, anticipating a Mandalorian advance on the planet, rounded up a sizable battle group to defend the planet, and placing camps among the Stereb cities. Pretty sure "placing" should be "placed".
  • Yup. Fixed.
• History: Some duplicate linking
  • Un-duplicated.
• BTS: You have a reference on The Essential Atlas which points to The Essential Guide to Warfare. Intentional?
  • Screwed up the referencing.
• Reads easy. Nice work. ^Jorrel_Fraajic 11:53, May 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 02:13, May 5, 2014 (UTC)

501

• Just putting my objections from IRC down here incase you forget:
• "...often broke out with tornadoes often posing..." Kill an often
• A bit of context for the Mandalorian wars would be nice in the body.
• "of these, Camp Three, featured the Little Bivoli mess wagon run by Zayne Carrick and Marn Hierogryph. Featuring..." Kill a feature. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:33, May 17, 2014 (UTC)
  • All fixed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 17:57, May 18, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Article for its star? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:58, May 28, 2014 (UTC)
  • Created and linked. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 22:28, May 31, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:02, June 30, 2014 (UTC)