Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/S'man

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S'man

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:00, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: It's not exactly common for you Inquisitors to come asking for FANs. Don't we work you hard enough?

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:56, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:30, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 19:04, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Rumor has it that S'man was a yes ... Never mind. Good work! ~ SavageBob 16:48, January 13, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Kreivi Wolter 12:50, January 15, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Who the S'man? You the S'man! IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:34, January 16, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:02, January 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Per the LG, can you convert the measurements into metric? Otherwise, it's clean. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:11, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
    • Done. I've added a ref to note that the figures have been converted and aren't straight from the source. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:16, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
  2. Prepare to be savaged...
    • Can you indicate what his species is?
      • Nope, doesn't say. Lack of anything to the contrary probably indicates Human, but that's just a guess. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:45, January 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • You could cut back on some excess verbiage by compressing a bit in places. For example, "General Dodonna and his staff set a number of goals aimed at strengthening their own position and uncovering" --> "General Dodonna and his staff aimed to strengthen their own position and uncover..."; "presented a briefing" --> "briefed"; "S'man approached Lieutenant Keyan Farlander, selecting the pilot for a reconnaissance mission to the system" --> "S'man selected Lieutenant Keyan Farlander for a reconnaissance mission to the system"; "in order to" --> "to"; "on an operation aimed at rescuing the Wookiees" --> "an operation to rescue the Wookiees";
      • All changed except one "in order to", which I'm reluctant to change unless you insist. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:45, January 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • "The medical droid's report was submitted to S'man, who was reading it in his office when Farlander arrived..." This reads a bit awkwardly. Perhaps, "S'man was reading the medical droid's report in his office when Farlander arrived..." (if he's reading the report, it's implied that the droid submitted it).
    • The "he's" and "him's" are getting confusing in the "Personality and traits." Please do a sweep to be sure that its unambiguous whether S'man or Farlander is meant.
    • Very good work, overall! ~ SavageBob 05:08, January 13, 2010 (UTC)

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