Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Rush Clovis/Legends

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Rush Clovis

• Nominated by: Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 09:51, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: InterGalactic man whore.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. JangFett ^(Talk) 15:19, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
2. [Redacted by administration]--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:35, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
3. I second this motion --Sean Red 16:13, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
4. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:12, July 22, 2010 (UTC)
5. This guy's a jerk.--Lord David 19:13, August 6, 2010 (UTC)
6. Leave it to Lucasfilm to leave his fate ambiguous. CC7567 ^(talk) 08:48, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
7. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 15:31, August 20, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Man whore

• Particularly the the first paragraph of "Confederate investments" seems irrelevant to Clovis. The first few sentences of the next paragraph follow this as well, until you mention that Clovis could retain his seat in the senate. Is there anyway you could shorten the information?
  • I've cut out a hefty chunk of it in the first paragraph, but I left in what I had in the second paragraph because I feel I need to be pretty thorough about why a senator from a known enemy supporter would be allowed to retain his seat. Let me know what you think. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 07:21, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
    • That's fine, it looks much better. :)
• Remember that we don't know what year these TCW episodes are taking place. Perhaps you could insert the infamous "Around 22 BBY" somewhere early in the article.
  • Getting so tired of that. It's in there now, though.
• That's it. Great work, Trayus. Also, be careful on spelling "Amidala." :P I saw a couple instances of "Amdiala." JangFett ^(Talk) 04:13, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Sorry about that, its a side-effect of swift typing on big hunks of text. Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 07:21, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Chack Attack

• "I have a lot faith in your survival skills." Is this quote correct? Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 15:19, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Woopsie. Fix-o'd. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 01:10, August 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:31, August 20, 2010 (UTC)

• I'm still waiting on an image for the P&T/Relationships section, but other than that I think its ready for the FAN treatment. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 09:51, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
  • It's done. - JMAS ^{Hey, it's me!} 16:24, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Speaking of that section, wouldn't putting "Relationship with Padme Amidala" be better than having a subsection within a subsection? Just curious.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:11, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
      • Good poing - it's been adjusted. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 07:21, July 14, 2010 (UTC)