Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Rokur Gepta (second nomination)

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  • 1 Rokur Gepta
    • 1.1 (4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)
      • 1.1.1 Support
      • 1.1.2 Object
        • 1.1.2.1 Farlstendoiro will not nominate the Crokes in a near future
        • 1.1.2.2 Ankle Slugs are all the rage:
        • 1.1.2.3 Jinzler
        • 1.1.2.4 Attack of the Clone
      • 1.1.3 Comments

Rokur Gepta

  • Nominated by: Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:42, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I'm happy with the way this turned out. He's a pretty cool character from an underrated series, and I think his article is now up to snuff. Oh yeah, and this is a former FA from a long time ago. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:42, April 18, 2010 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 19:57, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Yes, but the final twist in his history, I'm sure I've read it before in Jim Meddick's Robotman. The pseudo-Crokes then said the unexpected real appearance could either be a moral maxim or at least a good plot for Twilight Zone. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:52, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Ankle slugs are back again! Thefourdotelipsis 01:24, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Jinzler 12:37, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 22:44, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Great work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:24, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:54, June 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Farlstendoiro will not nominate the Crokes in a near future
  • If Gepta spent decades researching the Toka, and then he contacted Lando in 4 BBY, then you should include the information on his research before saying what he did in 5 BBY (joining the Sorcerers), so that information is ordered chronologically.
    • Changed to present that information earlier. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • "The Millennium Falcon then left the atmosphere, much to Gepta's chagrin" I understand that the Falcon escaped (by jumping to hyperspace or anything). Anyway, if this is so, you should specify so.
    • Added that it escaped by going to hyperspace. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Gepta reflected on the fact that Shanga was the only person, aside from Calrissian, to stand up to him in millennia." Again, maybe this could be mentioned among the facts before 5 BBY.
    • Added it in the body, in the first paragraph. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • Battle of ThonBoka. Consider adding "Main article: Battle of ThonBoka" to the opening of this section (Just a suggestion).
    • The "main" template is something that has always annoyed me, and since it's linked in that section, I'd rather not use that template. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • P&T: This is the first mention of Gepta having pets. Shouldn't they be mentioned somewhere in the history?
    • I'd say no, because they really aren't relevant to him aside from the fact that he liked them and occasionally fed crewmembers to them. That is, they don't really do anything, and certainly aren't vital to Gepta or the story. They're just a bit of an extra that reflect on him and his cruelty. It just doesn't fit in the body, I feel. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • I take my hat off to you.Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:26, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thank you, and thanks for reading it. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
      • My pleasure, believe me. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:52, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
Ankle Slugs are all the rage:
  • Should "Governor" be capitalized when you're using it to refer to Mer, but not putting it in front of his name?
    • The book doesn't capitalize it, so I went with that. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:01, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
      • Do you mean "does" capitalize it? Because they're all capitalized in the article. :P Thefourdotelipsis 00:13, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
        • No, it should not be capitalized. I'm just an idiot. :P Now fixed. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:34, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
  • "To ensure that Calrissian did not simply flee as soon as he left the meeting, Gepta would have the gambler's ship rendered incapable of leaving the meeting." - I know you don't mean meeting here a second time, and would have changed it myself, but wasn't sure if you meant planet or system. Unless you do mean meeting, and it's an oddity of those crazy books.
    • Haha, don't know how I missed that. It should be "system," and now says that. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:01, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • Does Mur die? If so, you might want to put that in, just to cap off the Rafa section a bit better.
    • Added. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:01, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • It seems a bit odd that you refer to Gepta as "Mutdah" during his impersonation routine. I would understand this in Calrissian's article, but from a biographical standpoint for Gepta, surely you would continuously refer to him merely as Gepta, and then mention when he chose to reveal his identity to Calrissian.
    • Changed most instances. There's still like one time I use Mutdah instead of Gepta because I feel it's appropriate. "while also taking the security officers Waywa Fybot and Bassi Vobah with him to arrest Mutdah" If you disagree, I can try to change it, but I think it makes the most sense using Mutdah, since everyone believes that Mutdah is the target, and it is directly relevant to Fybot, Vobah and Lando, not Gepta. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:12, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • Yeah, that makes sense. Thefourdotelipsis
  • On second thought, this happens a couple of times in the Rafa section, where Gepta "reveals" something in the story, such as his possession of the key. It's up to you, but I'd probably like to see his obtaining of the key be mentioned before he reveals it to Calrissian, just so it reinforces to the reader that we're following Gepta, as opposed to Calrissian.
    • I feel it fits best where is because it simply flows best there. Specifically, the bit about how Lando assumed that it had been obtained through illegal methods really couldn't go anywhere else. Savvy? Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:12, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • Yeah, that's fine. Thefourdotelipsis 01:24, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
  • Otherwise very, very good. An enjoyable read, and obviously a massive improvement on the old article. Thefourdotelipsis 02:07, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
Jinzler
  • You could mention at the end of the bio section that Calrissian later wrote about Gepta in How to Succeed in Everything --Jinzler 00:57, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
    • I had been considering that for a while. It's now added. Quote coming soon. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:12, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • I actually couldn't find a quote that I liked, so meh. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:20, June 4, 2010 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • "Oseon 5792 was under attack by a group of Renatasians who mistakenly believed Vuffi Raa to be responsible the destruction of their civilization and had followed the Millennium Falcon to the asteroid." Could you link this sentence to the last one better? The transition from the interruption straight to the battle is rather rough.
    • Check it out, yo. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:17, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Flying in starfighters, they managed to damage the asteroid's habitable dome": specifically, who's they?
    • Hopefully better. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:17, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Is it possible to fill in the years field for his successor as Scrivinir in the succession box?
    • Yes. Do you want me to do it? You just asked if it was possible, not if I could do it. :P Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:17, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
      • Well, you did it anyway, so whether I wanted you to or not is irrelevant. :P CC7567 (talk) 22:44, June 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nice work otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 02:32, June 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • Thanks for the reviews, everyone. :) Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:12, May 26, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:54, June 6, 2010 (UTC)