- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Raid on the New Jedi Temple
- Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:32, February 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: More fun and games from Fate of the Jedi: Backlash
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Support
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:10, February 23, 2011 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 02:36, March 5, 2011 (UTC) 
Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:28, March 17, 2011 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 21:57, March 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 19:47, March 30, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Floyd:
The words "psychosis" and "psychotic" are used in the second sentence of the intro; vary up the word choice.- Done. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
A touch of context on the Mandalorians is needed in the intro, and later in the body.- How's that? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
Prelude: " The Order captured several of the afflicted Jedi" Is there, or should there be, an article on this event?- I avoided it mainly because it refers to two events (the capture of Seff Hellin and the capture of Yaqeel and Bazel), and the latter isn't article worthy (no fight actually took place; they were just tranquilized). I felt that linking the capture of Hellin would be inaccurate and misleading since the statement refers to the capture of multiple Jedi, while the article for Seff's capture covers the capture of just Seff. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
In "The raid" section, the word "quickly" is used in successive sentences. Vary up the word choice.- Cut usage in half. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
- "
Durron also revealed that the government was calling for the Jedi's surrender, and that Hamner, Solo, Tainer, Thul, and Durron himself were on the list of Jedi to be arrested by the government, along with all of the other Jedi who had been recognized during the attack, including Saar." All the commas make this sentence very choppy and it screws up the flow of the paragraph. Please fix.- Cleaned up. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
- That's all. Good work. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:15, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
Similar to the Siege of the New Jedi Temple article, Coruscant should be included as the location in the infobox. (Coruscant should also be mentioned in the intro and in the body when first mentioning the Temple.)- Added in all three. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:21, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
Context needed on Tyria Sarkin Tainer in the body.- Done. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:21, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
- That's all. Nice work, as always, Jon. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 00:31, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:21, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
Should there be a {{Conjecture}} tag at the top? Based on the bolded part, which is decapitalized, the title is conjectural. Same goes for Siege of the New Jedi Temple.1358 (Talk) 18:54, March 12, 2011 (UTC)- No, they're both explicitly called "raid of the Jedi Temple" and "siege of the Jedi Temple" in the novels. The articles are only at "New Jedi Temple" because the Raid on the Jedi Temple page is currently a disambig (to which Siege of the Jedi Temple also links), and I figured it would be more appropriate to place the Raid and Siege articles at "New Jedi Temple" because both did take place at the New Jedi Temple. However, if you think it would be more appropriate to move the current disambig to "Raid on the Jedi Temple (disambiguation)" to allow for the articles to be moved, then I can do that. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:51, March 12, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:49, March 30, 2011 (UTC)