- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Quockran
- Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:42, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A wannabe Hutt species...
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Support
- This is a great first step, or crawl, to nominate Hutt one day. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:06, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 11:15, April 20, 2010 (UTC)- Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:36, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
- Oddly enough, I like scrapping asteroids too. ~ SavageBob 04:13, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
Grunny (talk) 09:31, May 1, 2010 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 17:09, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
- — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:49, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Farlstendoiro was already familiar with this species' damage resistance
You link slugs not to gastropod molluscs, but to lead projectiles.The intro says they are slugs; Bio says they resembled giant slugs. Choose one.Bio: "Quockrans averaged between 1.4 and 1.7 meters, although some could grow as long as 2 meters" If you are talking about their length, you should specify it in the first part of the sentence; you seem to suggest you are talking about their height.Society: The different droid models could use individual articles.- Gosh, another alien using the Xamster social networking site. Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:26, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
- These should all be addressed. I didn't give the Imperial droids a link as these are just "regular" droids. --Eyrezer 11:02, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
Final paragraph encased in the RPG scenario tags is unsourced.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:15, April 20, 2010 (UTC)- Toprawa:
Can we at least leave a redlink for this city? "in their homeworld's sole city"- Link added
Is there nothing from the Star Wars Encyclopedia? Given the publishing time frame of some of the other sources included, it seems like they may have received a mention within.- Nope
I wasn't sure if this was a mistake in the date or not, so I added a comma here to specify that this event took place in 1 ABY. Please revise if I am incorrect: "Shortly after the Battle of Yavin, in 1 ABY,"- I was actually using the date to refer to the Battle of Yavin, but as this creates inherent problems, I've now removed the 1 ABY altogether. The source doesn't specify it is within a year of Yavin.
And finally, not an objection, but I moved the non-canon George Lucas book into a "non-canon" subsection, since the non-canon tag notes the item as an "appearance," which isn't technically correct for our purposes. Feel free to format that as you see fit.Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, April 20, 2010 (UTC)- That's fine. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 10:57, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
- Prepare to be savaged...
There's a bit of repetitive language that could be cleaned up. For example, the word droid or droids appears many times in quick succession. Would it be possible to replace a few of these with synonyms, like automaton/automata? The same thing happens with "the fourth planet in the Quockra system, a star system..." with system being the offender. Then climate is repeated in the next couple sentences."and most inhabitants of the Minos Cluster were unaware they existed." Is this they the Quockrans or the droids?Can you stub the researcher who hires the adventurers for the scenario to find the Quockrans? That's it. Nice work. ~ SavageBob 16:10, April 22, 2010 (UTC)- Should all be addressed --Eyrezer 11:51, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
- Thanks to JMAS for supplying the Monsters and Aliens from George Lucas info. --Eyrezer 09:00, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:49, May 2, 2010 (UTC)