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Pyre's blaster

  • Nominated by: NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 20:18, 6 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This (along with Pyre and his armor) started as a proof-of-concept of my source combing. Then I actually read the entry in USWNE and said "wow that's cool. that should be on the page." So I added the info, but it wasn't enough words to section the article. So I started adding the history... and it steamrolled. So here we are. Thanks to those that helped along the way.
  • Date Archived: 01:24, 25 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1802 words (277 introduction, 1279 body, 246 behind the scenes)

Fun fact: I counted a total of 63 confirmed pew pews from the blaster. 14 hit their target. Pyre had an accuracy of 22.22%

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote I'm gonna need you to collate the accuracy statistics for the other First Order stormtroopers now for comparison. Imperators II(Talk) 12:04, 17 August 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Objection handled via Discord.—spookywillowwtalk 02:11, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 02:25, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Bro colour-coded his gun with his gold armour. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:12, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
  5. This is literally gold. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:58, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
  6. Booply (talk) 01:22, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

Object

The Man with the Golden Gun
  • "where he learned of Ryvora's treasonous actions" this clause is worded as if we already know what's happened. If you want to keep the details to a minimum I'd recommend rewording this.
  • Uses of Pyre, Ryvora etc. could use some switching to synonyms in some cases to avoid repetitive "Pyre did this. Pyre did that." or in one case "When Ryvora" followed by "After Ryvora". Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 22:02, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
    • I fixed some instances, but there are more. I'll be working on this and repost here when I'm done. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 13:01, 19 July 2023 (UTC)
    • Finished. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 23:16, 20 August 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • I think it might work better if you restructured the info surrounding the attack on Tehar. Perhaps you could pipelink the attack page and introduce the planet context there instead of a seperate mention after.
    • Seems this was fixed by another's copy-edit. Is it good to go? NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 12:18, 18 August 2023 (UTC)
      • That works with me Lewisr (talk) 14:56, 18 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Tierny's rank should be included Lewisr (talk) 22:43, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
Anil
  • "Ren then used the Force to force Pyre […]" Do you mind rewording that bit to not repeat "force"? :P
  • Do you think Category:First Order would be appropriate? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:11, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
    • I created First Order weapons (threw Vonreg's blaster in too), a subsection to First Order. How is that? NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 08:53, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:23, 25 August 2023 (UTC)