- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Puck Naeco
- Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:16, April 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Thanks to The Essential Guide to Warfare.
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Terrific, GT.—Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 01:09, April 17, 2012 (UTC)- Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:38, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Plagueis327 19:25, April 20, 2012 (UTC)
- FA/GA all the Red Squadron! Well, maybe not Luke. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 23:13, April 20, 2012 (UTC) - --Eyrezer 11:24, April 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Don't let Cav hold you back! Do Luke too! Menkooroo 20:34, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Lee's charge
Could you mention his homeworld in the intro.Context for Vader in the intro.His gender should be mentioned in the body.- Good job. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:41, April 17, 2012 (UTC)
- All three added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:16, April 17, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
A small mention of the outcome of the battle would be appreciated.- Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:53, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
It's been a while seen I've seen ANH - but is there a "Red Twelve, standing by" line at all?- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 08:36, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
- He's one of the three that don't bother. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:53, April 19, 2012 (UTC)
Drop the puck
If this is his X-wing, shouldn't Star Wars: X-Wing get a (Fighter only) nod in the "Appearances" section?- Yes it should. Good catch. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
"When the other pilots became aware of Naeco's attraction to Jan-lo" kind of reads as if the attraction is something that's already been introduced. Can you introduce it earlier, maybe at the end of the first paragraph, when Jan-Lo and the practical jokes first get shout-outs?- Tried rewording it instead. See if that works and I'll stick it in earlier if it doesn't. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
Just to confirm: Star Wars 6: Is This the Final Chapter? is more than just (Fighter only)?- It's not. Missed that one. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
I found his X-wing in a few adaptations, but I think some more need to be checked: Any mention/fighter appearance in the junior novelization, radio drama, Perfect Evil, The Rise and Fall of Darth Vader, or the novel Death Star? I can check the Radio Drama if you need it.- Added what I could find. Could you check the radio drama, please. I also can't check Perfect Evil since I don't have it. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Perfect Evil doesn't show his X-wing being destroyed by Vader like the other adaptations, but it does include a shot of all twelve X-wings approaching the Death Star. He's in the radio drama, and he even has a line. After Vader finishes off the Y-wings, Garven orders a soundoff. Red Twelve chimes in with "Red Twelve, right behind you, Read Leader." Red Ten later says "They're all over us back here. They got Red Twelve!" Two candidates for a quote for the "Battle of Yavin" section right there. :) Probably worth a mention in the BTS that although the end credits named all the voice actors, they didn't say who played Red Twelve. Also, since the radio drama includes and names Red Twelve, the sentence in the BTS immediately before ref [8] could be expanded accordingly. Menkooroo 02:06, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Great. Quote added and BTS expanded. Thanks for your help. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:37, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Perfect Evil doesn't show his X-wing being destroyed by Vader like the other adaptations, but it does include a shot of all twelve X-wings approaching the Death Star. He's in the radio drama, and he even has a line. After Vader finishes off the Y-wings, Garven orders a soundoff. Red Twelve chimes in with "Red Twelve, right behind you, Read Leader." Red Ten later says "They're all over us back here. They got Red Twelve!" Two candidates for a quote for the "Battle of Yavin" section right there. :) Probably worth a mention in the BTS that although the end credits named all the voice actors, they didn't say who played Red Twelve. Also, since the radio drama includes and names Red Twelve, the sentence in the BTS immediately before ref [8] could be expanded accordingly. Menkooroo 02:06, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Added what I could find. Could you check the radio drama, please. I also can't check Perfect Evil since I don't have it. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
Also, if he's mentioned in the script, he's probably mentioned in Star Wars: The Annotated Screenplays.Menkooroo 04:15, April 22, 2012 (UTC)- Can't check that one either. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- He's mentioned on page 109 of the Annotated Screenplays. "Red Twelve's X-wing fighter is hit by Vader's laserfire, and it explodes into flames against the trench." Before this, Red Twelve is indirectly mentioned as one of Red Leader's wingmates and as "Rebel pilots." JangFett (Talk) 17:47, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks. Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:03, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- He's mentioned on page 109 of the Annotated Screenplays. "Red Twelve's X-wing fighter is hit by Vader's laserfire, and it explodes into flames against the trench." Before this, Red Twelve is indirectly mentioned as one of Red Leader's wingmates and as "Rebel pilots." JangFett (Talk) 17:47, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Can't check that one either. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:38, April 22, 2012 (UTC)
There may be a discrepancy worth noting in the BTS. The article asserts that Red Twelve is Garven's wingman and refs it to the CSWE, but the CCG card "Red 10" (found here) states that Red Ten was assigned to be Read Leader's wingman for the attack.Menkooroo 02:06, April 23, 2012 (UTC)- If they were flying in groups of three they were both his wingmen. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:37, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 21:19, April 23, 2012 (UTC)