- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Pharl McQuarrie
- Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:13, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Act on Instinct update brought him here. 1,356 words.
(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
- Another good minor OT character nom by Toprawa. This is assuming CC's objections are met. Hanzo Hasashi 05:03, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
Damned right, LFL does that. Why go to Chee when you can hit a single button here to find a good character? CC7567 (talk) 06:35, November 7, 2011 (UTC)- Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:03, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Read it this morning. Great work. :) JangFett (Talk) 20:35, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
- North Kilt Town's most famous native. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:58, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:53, November 28, 2011 (UTC)
Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:47, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
Object
How could I not? :P
Really nitpicky stuff, but just wondered: would the Republic Navy be an appropriate sub-affiliation in the infobox?- No more or less than Alliance Army would be. I know some people like to go two or three bullets deep for that infobox field, but I prefer to keep it to the most basic level. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:31, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
Yeah, I think it would be worth creating articles for those two ships.- Created and linked. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:31, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
Would {{CSWECite}} be appropriate to use, or is he featured in more than one entry?- I've employed the citation template for the referencing, so I must assume you mean in the Appearances list. Forgive my impertinence, but I find the use of this template in the Appearances to be an unnecessary practice some users have developed. The template was created as a way to clarify and cite obscure multi-entry mentions for sourcing purposes, not for Appearances list use. In the absence of any formal requirement, I would prefer to not use it there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:31, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
Is it worth listing Act on Instinct in the Bts? I mean, that was a pretty surprising nod to the OT material, so it might be notable enough to warrant a small mention, given simply how long it was (OOU) between the comic and his original appearance in ESB.- I didn't think it strictly necessary, but public opinion seems to want it there, so I'm happy to oblige. Added in. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:31, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
- I'm just surprised they were shrewd enough to put him in TCW, even if it was only a comic. :P CC7567 (talk) 03:11, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Sometimes I get the feeling LFL people look at our FAs and GAs and get their ideas from there, but maybe I'm just being paranoid. Thanks for the quick review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:31, November 7, 2011 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
A Ralltiiri Rebel: "Later, General Carlist Rieekan personally selected McQuarrie to be his second-in-command at the Rebellion's secret headquarters, Echo Base, on the Outer Rim Territories ice planet Hoth, as a general, where he would once more serve alongside Webb." There's so many commas in there I forgot how it started by the time I got to the end. You may have a better idea, but I think it works better if you cut one out by rewording like "Later, General Carlist Rieekan personally selected McQuarrie to serve as a general and his second-in-command at the Rebellion's secret headquarters, Echo Base, on the Outer Rim Territories ice planet Hoth, where he would once more serve alongside Webb."- Sure thing. I used your example. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:55, November 26, 2011 (UTC)
A Ralltiiri Rebel: "McQuarrie would go on to participate in the staggering Rebel defeat at the Battle of Hoth." Tiny bit of explanation on the battle wouldn't go amiss, just something about the Empire attacking and a date. Also, there's a few "would go on"s in there so you might want to make one a "went on." Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:55, November 26, 2011 (UTC)- I added a little bit of context for the battle. I had left the year out in that sentence because I establish the year for the battle in the sentence immediately preceding. If you would prefer to see something a little bit more or different, please let me know. Also reworded "went on" instances.
- Nah, that's fine. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:53, November 28, 2011 (UTC)
- I added a little bit of context for the battle. I had left the year out in that sentence because I establish the year for the battle in the sentence immediately preceding. If you would prefer to see something a little bit more or different, please let me know. Also reworded "went on" instances.
Personality and traits: Might be worth mentioning his experience with the Republic during the Clone Wars when discussing his military experience. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:58, November 24, 2011 (UTC)- I added a bit in there about his Republic service without trying to go into it too much, since he doesn't exactly do anything specific in the comic. Thanks for the review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:55, November 26, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 09:47, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
- Someone just say the word and I'll create articles for McQuarrie's cruiser and the Separatist Lucrehulk from the Ukio battle. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:13, November 7, 2011 (UTC)