Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Pera

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Pera

  • Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 03:05, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Badass priest.

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Indeed.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:29, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote --Eyrezer 04:59, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote—Tommy 9281 22:11, September 1, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:48, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
  5. I thought he was a team of surgeons, but that was just a pair o' docs. ~ SavageBob 15:26, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Cylka-talk- 05:17, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:53, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Menkooroo 18:42, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Twin:
  • "…a faith that had brought about the settlement of Aduba-3 originally, as a agricultural colony." I'm not sure what you are trying to say here.
    • Tweaked.
  • "one of the few untainted structures located within the port of Tun Aduban." Some beforehand context on what would have otherwise tainted the structure.
    • I've given context later, but it's in the same sentence. Better?
  • That's all.—Tommy 9281 03:20, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged...
  • Just one: Do we know that he was only known as "Pera" in-universe? It would seem logical that he'd have another name, but if the OS says he was only known as Pera, no problem. ~ SavageBob 21:33, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
    • Yep, the original source says, "The House of a Higher Power is run by a Verpine priest known only as Pera." --Eyrezer 06:20, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
Savage to be prepared...
  • I gotta object, man. The body needs at least one image. Menkooroo 21:23, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
    • Like so? --Eyrezer 06:16, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
  • Yup. But I'm still seeing extraneous detail that should be cut down for salience's sake (ie, it's pbp). eg...
    • "Solo maintained his demeanor and made sure Chewbacca did not run rampant in a punitive attack against the mob, until he was finally pulled off his mount" is too detailed and isn't even about Pera to boot.
    • "Pera noted that a stray shot had killed his bantha. The Verpine was querulous as to just how they would be able to carry the cyborg's body up the hill, but Solo was undaunted. Chewbacca proved strong enough to carry the travois on his back..." is a bit too detailed. Solo being undaunted isn't really that relevant to Pera, ya know?
      • Shortened a little.
    • A few more cases of "so and so noted", and it seems like every one of Pera's lines from the comic has been summarized in this article. A bit too much. Menkooroo 06:05, September 27, 2010 (UTC)
      • Tweaked one bit. Any other specific ones? Since I've just got the omnibus with this issue in, I figure I might as well try and get it through. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:30, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
        • You're a better man than I. :^) A couple other examples:
          • "The Verpine requested that Solo take the body up to the hill, but the smuggler was reluctant. Pera produced a sack of coins that had been taken off of the dead cyborg's person and offered it to Solo should he choose to bury the spacer—the new incentive was more than enough to convince the Human to take the job" seems to me like a really long-winded and flowery way of saying "Pera, aided by a sack of coins, was able to convince Solo to take the body up to the hill." Whaddya think?
          • "After batting one of the last spacers with his spade, Pera surveyed the carnage and noted that violence only ever spawned more violence. He then shared with Solo his belief that every transgression was paid off with equal retribution" is a clutch example of the article describing in detail every line that Pera says. I feel like that should be left out of the bio entirely and kept solely in the p & t. Thoughts? Menkooroo 17:54, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
            • Makes sense. The retribution bit is already in P&T but I've added the bit about violence where it seemed appropriate and removed this bit from the bio. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:21, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
Cylka
  • one of the few untainted structures located - Despite Tommy's objection and your fix, I can't say that I understand what tainted the other buildings.
    • Gamer 4 doesn't explain what is meant be untainted. --Eyrezer 05:12, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • The burial hill is sometimes spelled as "Spacers' Hill" and other times as "Spacer's Hill." Please check this.
    • Changed all to Spacer's Hill, per Gamer 4. --Eyrezer 05:12, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Otherwise, interesting character. Cylka-talk- 06:26, September 23, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 21:19, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

  • If any image gurus feel like illustrating the article, please go ahead. I do not have the facilities to do so myself. Thefourdotelipsis 03:05, July 14, 2010 (UTC)