Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Onoam

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Onoam

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 03:34, 18 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: An update done last year in June bumped this over the limit, and further cleanup has towed it to 1135. A summary of the changes since this was promoted to GA initially in 2021 can be found here and the original nominator is Minnabird. Felt bad for pushing it over (though it was needed, so I guess needs must) but figured I'd tow it over properly as part of the wider effort to keep as many Canon status articles as we can maintained.
  • Date Archived: 11:47, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1222 words (151 introduction, 999 body, 72 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1135 words (128 introduction, 938 body, 69 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:NOVELSWP:COMICSWP:AST

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Support

  1. Inqvote Nice work! Imperators II(Talk) 20:05, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
  2. Wok142 (talk) 20:51, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Thanks for this, would've been a shame if one of Minna's lost status Fan26 (Talk) 17:12, 13 June 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Per Fan Lewisr (talk) 21:22, 13 June 2024 (UTC)
  5. Zed42 Wolfpack emblem (talk) 23:02, 6 July 2024 (UTC)
  6. Booply (talk) 00:10, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote OOM 224 (he/him/they) 11:46, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • Should note the 1stp's artist. Imperators II(Talk) 10:25, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
  • "As a newly-minted senator" I think I'd be good to specify senator of what constituency here.
    • Sorry, should've been clearer. Rather, I had in mind noting that Amidala was a senator representing the Chommell sector or whatever. Since I think that gives just a bit of extra context on why Amidala even considered the moons to begin with, and also indicates the extent of her authority.
  • Similarly, might context for where the enslaved workers were from be helpful here?
  • "neighboring planet of Karlinus" — is "neighboring" a descriptor used in the source? Might be clearer to just say that Karlinus was in the same sector as the Naboo system? Imperators II(Talk) 19:33, 10 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Swapped, as the specific term isn't used in QS so would need an extra ref. However…since I do plan to do a lot of Karlinus-tied nominating in the future, I do want to note that the term is canonically used in other parts of the trilogy as a way to establish the tighter ties between Karlinus and Naboo comparative to other Chommell sector planets. It's not necessarily relevant to Onoam itself, I'll grant, but is definitely more fitting for some other articles than the sector.—spookywillowwtalk 06:05, 11 May 2024 (UTC)
      • I think in those cases where it is even more important to note that fact than here saying that Karlinus was a neighboring Chommell sector world would be perfect. Since that kinda gives both astrographical (closely situated worlds) and potentially extra political context (same sector) rolled in one.
  • When Dalné is first mentioned in History I think it should note that she was specifically the queen of Naboo, since the monarchy isn't even brought up before that so it can be a bit confusing.
  • Should Bail's rebel movement be pipelinked to this?
  • The above movement should also be contextified as an anti-Empire one so that a hint is given as to why the Partisans were targeting Panaka. Imperators II(Talk) 20:44, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • This sentence in Rocky relationship is confusing me: "During the last days of the Galactic Republic, the mining moons of Naboo had difficulty balancing their need to meet production quotas with the rule of Naboo." What exactly does the rule of Naboo thing mean in terms of balancing the quotas? Does simply saying "the mining moons of Naboo had difficulty meeting production quotas" still capture what this sentence is trying to convey? Wok142 (talk) 20:06, 21 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments

  • The BtS sentence about the moons appears to be there per a GA objection about how some other sources (loosely) state about there being three named Naboo moons. I did question it, but figured it probably was worth keeping.—spookywillowwtalk 03:34, 18 April 2024 (UTC)
  • I don't suppose the Appearances/Sources for Onoam ID any of the other moons? Imperators II(Talk) 10:25, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Hmm, did you consider noting, however briefly, the relationship between Organa and Amidala? I get that it might not be super relevant strictly to Onoam's IU history, but still feel like storytelling-wise that connection was absolutely intentional and important. Imperators II(Talk) 20:44, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Disagreed; Bail had his eye on Panaka as a potential recruit for the Alliance and that's a subplot as to why he's mad about Saw having killed him. There's a lot of various reasons why he may or may not have recognized Onoam by name that aren't necessarily tied to Amidala.—spookywillowwtalk 19:49, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
      • Yeah, I meant more the OOU-ish "Amidala had dealings with those moons, and a generation later, so did her daughter" but I recognize now that the strictly IU chain of causality there is kinda tenuous. Imperators II(Talk) 20:05, 16 May 2024 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 11:46, 7 July 2024 (UTC)