Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Noa Briqualon

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Noa Briqualon

  • Nominated by: Menkooroo (talk) 01:58, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Hi, I'm Wilford Brimley and I have diabeetus. It hurts me to pee and it causes me to be short with my family. I can't sleep at night. The other day I stubbed my toe and took it out on the dog. And two weeks ago I ran out of vanilla ice cream and struck my wife. Then I find out my wife has been dead for six years. Who the hell did I hit?

(3 Inqs/5 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Good job! I've been wanting to see this one expanded for a long time, but I was too lazy to do it myself. :P Adamwankenobi (talk) 03:05, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Plagueis327 (talk) 14:50, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:52, September 22, 2012 (UTC)
  4. (Grumbles like an mid-level scout.) Let's feature that doggone article already! --LelalMekha (talk) 16:04, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Ob-La-Di, Ob-La-Da, life goes on, bra... ~SavageBOB sig 14:26, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Endor's Grinch. CC7567 (talk) 20:04, November 21, 2012 (UTC)
  7. Diabeetus.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:57, December 6, 2012 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:30, December 16, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Savaged…
  • In the intro, perhaps a few words of context are in order for the reason Teek was bringing strange children to him.
  • Similarly, context in the intro for the Marauders.
  • It's not clear that the Sanyassans and the Marauders refer to the same group in in the intro, so maybe clarify that too (perhaps in tandem with the above).
  • The final paragraph of "New friends, new threats" can use a bit of PBP pruning. A few details seem too specific or mundane to mention, like the specifics of how Briqualon consoled Cindel (maybe enough to just say he consoled her), the fact that Wicket threw water on him to wake him up, and the fact that Noa got dressed when he got out of bed.
  • On the other hand, the fact that Cindel's family was murdered by Marauders is probably worth mentioning when that murder first comes into the article.
  • Context on King Terak in the same section is needed.
  • The images all seem kind of dark on my monitor. Are they appearing that way to you? I can brighten them up a bit if that would help. ~SavageBOB sig 14:54, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • Yeah, they are a bit dark. If you were willing to do that, it would be wonderful! All I have right now in terms of image editing is MSPaint. And, since I'm greedy, I'll ask if you can do the images in Salak Weet as well... ;) Menkooroo (talk) 15:20, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • The images look great! Thanks a million. I think I've addressed everything; let me know what you think. Terak was introduced as the Marauders' King Terak in the first bio subsection, but I took your advice and threw another "King" in front of his name in the third subsection as a reminder. Hope that's what you were looking for. Menkooroo (talk) 13:37, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
      • Looks good! I noticed that lots of the BfE images were dark, so I went on a brightening spree. It seems the DVD release is underexposed, meaning everything comes out murky and dark in screenshots. Let me know if you ever try to FA another article from it, but in the meantime, you can always download the Gimp for free. :) ~SavageBOB sig 14:26, October 15, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:30, December 16, 2012 (UTC)

Call Liberty Medical. It'll help you live a better life. Adamwankenobi (talk) 03:05, September 18, 2012 (UTC)