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- Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:57, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
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Support
- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his)
(talk) 02:07, 7 November 2021 (UTC) 
OOM 224 17:37, 6 December 2021 (UTC)- UberSoldat93
(talk) 13:05, 7 February 2022 (UTC) - Supreme Emperor Holocomm 05:55, 8 February 2022 (UTC)
- JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 15:45, 8 February 2022 (UTC)
- Assuming that the intro will be expanded :P LucaRoR (Talk) 12:32, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
- Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 08:14, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
Object
New ChaimTzvi
Two small objections: I'd change "the Human Naboo" to "the Human Naboo people".I'd split the first sentence of "History" or otherwise reword "in order to prevent ... were targeted first" to "they targeted ... to prevent ...". Other than those things, great.-- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 05:12, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
- Done, though I just reworded that first sentence instead. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:26, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
OOM
"Toward" is preferred over "towards" in formal writing- Done
"eight battle droids, four heavy beetle droids, and two Single Trooper Aerial Platforms" — since STAPs were manned by B1s, are the pilots amongst the "eight battle droids" mentioned?OOM 224 21:51, 14 November 2021 (UTC)- The pilots aren't counted but I'm not convinced they should be, we wouldn't go out of our way to specify that the TIE Fighters at Yavin were manned by Imperial pilots for example. For the record the beetle droids are manned by B1s too. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:09, 23 November 2021 (UTC)
- Ah okay, your reasoning makes sense, but it still needs to be clarified to readers that those mounts were operated separate from the aforementioned battle droid infantrymen. As the sentence is now, I'm thinking of it as if it says "eight soldiers, four cars, and two bikes," where some of the soldiers are potentially the ones on the vehicles rather than being on foot. Perhaps it would be better to say something like "eight battle droids, four heavy beetle droid units, and two Single Trooper Aerial Platform units"? OOM 224 17:29, 25 November 2021 (UTC)
- Done Commander Code-8 Hello There! 00:13, 6 December 2021 (UTC)
- Ah okay, your reasoning makes sense, but it still needs to be clarified to readers that those mounts were operated separate from the aforementioned battle droid infantrymen. As the sentence is now, I'm thinking of it as if it says "eight soldiers, four cars, and two bikes," where some of the soldiers are potentially the ones on the vehicles rather than being on foot. Perhaps it would be better to say something like "eight battle droids, four heavy beetle droid units, and two Single Trooper Aerial Platform units"? OOM 224 17:29, 25 November 2021 (UTC)
- The pilots aren't counted but I'm not convinced they should be, we wouldn't go out of our way to specify that the TIE Fighters at Yavin were manned by Imperial pilots for example. For the record the beetle droids are manned by B1s too. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:09, 23 November 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
BTS can support an image. Is it possible to get a shot from this "original version," or a scan from the guide showcasing the difference in structures?- Added Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:05, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
Luca
You repeat the word "path" seven times, could you change a few of them?LucaRoR (Talk) 06:49, 8 February 2022 (UTC)
- Thesaurus time, done Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:04, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments
- There are currently 993 words, by my count OOM 224 21:07, 9 February 2022 (UTC)
- Hmm, I could expand the intro with a little more description of the city. The context of its mention in End Game is that Darth Maul knew that OOM-9 destroyed the transmitter but that felt too minor to note. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:04, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:42, 15 February 2022 (UTC)