- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
- Nominated by: OOM 224 (he/him) 11:49, 9 January 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: My first Resistance nom, from my favourite episode of the series. Massive thanks to Dani for their help and encouragement along the way and Fred for providing the images!
- Date Archived: 14:30, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 4063 words (196 introduction, 3586 body, 281 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 4068 words (197 introduction, 3591 body, 280 behind the scenes)
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:RESISTANCE, WP:WOMEN
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Always happy to see more Resistance noms.—spookywillowwtalk 16:02, 24 January 2024 (UTC)- Lewisr (talk) 19:04, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
- Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 09:36, 11 March 2024 (UTC)
- Wok142 (talk) 20:20, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
- Welcome to Team Colossus :) NBDani
(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 21:10, 16 April 2024 (UTC) - Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:30, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
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spookly
I think, especially given the amount of focus there is on her being a sharp engineer, there should be enough content for a skills section.- The episode guide cite should be citing the specific slides of story gallery/concept art or whatnot such as done here rather than the main page.
Given it gets concept art for an ID and gets used enough—her blaster can get stubbed and added. It's listed on the Resistance's scope spreadsheet anyhow, vaguely having recalled it being added after finding said art.—spookywillowwtalk 06:04, 13 January 2024 (UTC)Homeworld to be infobox'd.- I feel like the fact she'd been tracking the Colossus for days should be introduced in that first paragraph of the article, because—even though they discover it later in the episode—it chronologically occurs before the distress call sent.
- It might be helpful to contexualize Neeku on first mention as a mechanic as well, to better give sense to why he'd be the one working with her.
- Per Pamarthen bantha stew we normally give Aunt Z's full name them "Aunt Z" after in quotes, similar to how Chiss core names get treated.
- Thoughts on splitting the Pirates insolence section into two sections with two then three paragraphs? Four is—okay, in some rarer circumstances, but we don't really do five so much nowadays.
- It's become precedent to swap the term "disabled" out for a symonym.
- Context for 4D-M1N.
Seems like the Instagram cite has a slight error because it's showing a {{{description}}}—spookywillowwtalk 18:55, 23 January 2024 (UTC)
Dani
From Ultimate Star Wars, New Edition, "There are dining establishments and taverns such as Aunt Z's." This implies there are multiple taverns so I think its unfair to say "the station's tavern" NBDani(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 00:17, 24 January 2024 (UTC)Unidentified Kassk pirate needs to be linked (See Discord DMs for more info) NBDani(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 00:30, 16 April 2024 (UTC)Per precedent, ship names need to be sourced. Galleon isn't used in the episode. Fortunately it's used in Star Wars: Timelines (page 303 if you want to check). NBDani(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 00:30, 16 April 2024 (UTC)Willing to relent but I dislike referring to Kazuda Xiono as a Spy during Season 2. He was a spy while on Castilon but during Season 2 he's more just an active member of the Resistance. NBDani(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 00:46, 16 April 2024 (UTC)"installed K-spline regulators in service tunnel A2" the regulators are only referred to as "regulators" K-spline is what Neeku installed on the bridge. NBDani(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 01:24, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Lew
Where Nena was first identified needs to be documentedLewisr (talk) 18:58, 25 January 2024 (UTC)- Hmm, I thought the wording "X appears in Y"—rather than "first appeared" and without specifying the identification of the name—suffices if there's only a single appearance, unless the trailer changes things? (added for now) OOM 224 (he/him) 19:02, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
- Generally we'd say "appeared/mentioned in" if there was only the one app/source overall. Since there's other trailers/clips etc that Nena is in we include the first, or per Voxx Cluster you could use introduced or a variant. In regards to ID, since there are those trailers/clips pre episode release, we usually include the 1stID even if is in the episode, see Mika Grey for example Lewisr (talk) 04:31, 27 January 2024 (UTC)
- Hmm, I thought the wording "X appears in Y"—rather than "first appeared" and without specifying the identification of the name—suffices if there's only a single appearance, unless the trailer changes things? (added for now) OOM 224 (he/him) 19:02, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
The pronouns for Captain Doza, Opeepit, Aunt Z, Vusk and Kragan aren't citable to the episode itselfLewisr (talk) 20:13, 27 January 2024 (UTC)Last thing, there's a disabling in the "Repercussions" section, if you wouldn't mind changing that pleaseLewisr (talk) 04:54, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
Tommy
In the first sentence - "Bright" has four uses as an adjective, relevant here as it isn't immediately clear whether it means clever or cheerful. I'd recommend swapping it out.Some context for Tierny and Pyre would be good (will finish this review soon, sorry time ran out on me).Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 14:11, 7 March 2024 (UTC)I started adding individual context for the pirates but I've realised there are too many and it's just getting repetitive. I think it might be better to introduce them all by name (and possibly species for extra context) when the Warbird gang is first mentioned. What do you think?"Xiono tried to warn the rest of the Colossus about Nalor's secret alongside CB-23, who asked for elaboration" - this currently reads as CB-23 asking for elaboration, but I assume it's the rest of the Colossus, since the droid was with them in Nalor's ship. If so, could you rephrase.Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 17:02, 9 March 2024 (UTC)- Sorry about that paragraph, it wasn't really clear that it was indeed CB-23 who was asking so I've hopefully rephrased it for the better. The episode didn't really show Kaz himself warning the rest of the Colossus, only that he intended to do so. CB-23 also disappeared after the conversation so I've made it clearer that Kaz alone went down into Engineering. OOM 224 (he/him) 10:19, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
Wok
In Unpleasant work, is it accurate to say left her homeworld to become a contractor? Or did she just leave her homeworld and then become a contractor.Wok142 (talk) 20:13, 13 April 2024 (UTC)Second sentence in the third paragraph of Quick fixes, it should say "Although Vozo's replacement of micro-cables there was ineffective" instead of "were ineffective" since the was is referring to the action of replacement (singular) and not the micro-cables (plural).Wok142 (talk) 20:13, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
Anil
Would Category:Freed beings be applicable here?One last nitpick: Would you mind pipelinking Team Colossus somewhere in the body (and maybe in the intro as well)? Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:42, 17 April 2024 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 14:30, 19 April 2024 (UTC)