Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Montross

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Montross

  • Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 08:16, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The voice of Clancy Brown compels you.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:38, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 13:42, 17 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Excellent. The lack of images is a bit jarring, but since it's a console-only game, understandable. Thefourdotelipsis 10:45, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:02, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:10, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the Very Crowded Desk of Chack Jadson:
    • "When a young boy called Jango Fett joined the Mandalorians and became like a son to Mereel, Montross grew enraged at Mereel's favoritism and contemptuous of Fett." This sentence just reads awkwardly to me.
    • You use "supposedly" twice in the first sentence of the second paragraph.
    • "When they arrived, the resistance proved not to be minimal." Too corny, IMO.
    • How did Sebolto kill himself?
    • You start two consecutive sentences with "as" in the same paragraph.
    • Mandos were better before Traviss. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:02, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
      • Resolved all of those. Except Traviss. :P - Lord Hydronium 10:46, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "Montross shooting down stragglers as they retreated" Clarify whose stragglers are being shot here.
    • "Fett led them to the closest town to his family's farm, where the Mandalorians expected Vizsla to go to resupply;" Reword/clarify.
    • "Mereel followed and ordered Montross to abort his run and do the same." Followed where?
    • "Upon arriving, though, they were ambushed by the Death Watch, who had in fact hired the Mandalorians to lure them into a trap. " Clarify Death Watch involvement, please.
    • "Montross had personal contempt of Fett, considering him a child and believing him to be a coward, but as an opportunist, he also believed that Mereel's attachment would interfere with his picking of a successor." Reword/Clarify.
    • Fascinating BTS. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 19:43, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
  3. From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
    • "becoming like a son to Mereel" — this reads a bit awkwardly; please revise.
    • "who told the true story of Mereel's death" — to whom? This could be clarified some.
    • The intro says that Montross killed Rozatta, but this is not made clear in the bio — it merely says that he told Fett she was still alive.
    • "However, Montross was a coward" — fairly blatant POV. Please state who thought him to be a coward, or, if that info doesn't exist, reword it to be a bit milder.
    • "Fett considered Montross to be the hardest opponent he had ever faced" — I think Mace Windu might have changed Fett's opinion on the matter. I would suggest adding an "as of 27 BBY" or something to the end of the sentence.
    • What's the holdup on the images? I'd rather they were added before this is passed.
  4. From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
    • "Before leaving, Montross planted thermal charges around the station. Fett escaped the trap, learning from the dying Rozatta where Montross had gone." The detonators were to trap Fett I assume.
      • Yeah. Cleared up.
    • Bill Bailey was cast as Montross? At 12 years old? I suspect you might mean another Bill Bailey. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:03, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
      • I didn't link that. :P It's removed now. - Lord Hydronium 19:16, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:10, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

  • Images are coming. The infobox image will get replaced with a headshot when that happens, too. - Lord Hydronium 08:16, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
    • Because it's been about two months since I first wrote this, I should explain. I need a few screenshots from the game, but since it's a console game not many can get those, and the guy who was getting them seems to be MIA. So in short, I don't know when images will arrive. Even if this passed without them, though, it would be a year before it got on the front page anyway, and I would hope that something could be done within a year. - Lord Hydronium 18:41, 28 August 2008 (UTC)