Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Mission to the Maw

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Mission to the Maw

  • Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:27, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: At long last—JujiggumProductions, in cooperation with WookieeProject Legacy Era, gives to you what's basically half the entire events of Allies. Seriously. Altogether this mission takes up probably half the book. If not more. Also: Please note that there are mega-big spoilers from publisher's summaries for Vortex and Conviction, as well as for the Vortex excerpt in the back of Allies

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Very nice. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:31, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Nice article. Just understand that the article will neeed to be seriously edited and have its FA status will need to be reevaluated once the next books are released.--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 23:32, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
    • Not necessarily—keep in mind that I've done the final battles of FotJ novels before and have never had any issues with them in this aspect; I doubt any major changes will need to be made to this article outside the aftermath section. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:04, September 20, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Nice article, Jonjedigrandmaster!--Lord David 23:30, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 00:43, October 31, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Great job, you've done just as well with all the other "new" articles. You do a much better job summarizing Vortex than the actual plot summary on the book's page does. -Shadowsaber623 23:05, December 13, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Looks good to me, even through the nagging headache that's been sneaking up on me from sleep deprivation. Trak Nar Ramble on 05:04, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote --Eyrezer 22:59, December 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Clone
  • Could you explain why the Skirmish at the Fountain of the Ancients has its own article? There isn't a specific policy that dictates this, but as far as I know, concurrent battles are normally just battles that take place in different locations, not necessarily battles that are subsectioned—otherwise, the Battle of Teth or the Battle of Christophsis could be three or more separate battles each. I do realize that the skirmish at the Fountain of the Ancients may have some info that warrants its own article, so if you could perhaps clarify that for me, that would be great. I suspect that it's been separated because it's not part of the main mission to the Maw, but again, I'd appreciate it if you could humor me here.
    • Yeah, this is something I thought long and hard about when I was making these two articles. I gave the skirmish its own article because it's a separate campaign, if you will, than the mission to the Maw itself. The Sith get sidetracked and act on an objective that doesn't relate to this mission, and the skirmish has some significant aftereffects that don't realte to the mission and would not fit in this article in the detail that would be required for comprehensiveness. A lot of the aftereffects do have significant relation to the mission to the Maw, which is why I also included some details of the skirmish in this article, but there is still information about it that doesn't fit here. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 14:35, October 30, 2010 (UTC)
      • That's fine, then. CC7567 (talk) 00:43, October 31, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Luke ordered the group to pause for a moment as they reached the end of the tunnel, before igniting their lightsabers": the wording here is slightly unclear; as it stands, the organization of the latter dependent clause makes it sound like Luke ignited the entire group's lightsabers, and I'm not sure if that's what you want to say. Please try to reword for specificity.
  • Very well-written otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 02:50, October 30, 2010 (UTC)
Sounds like Orc-mischief to me...
  • The second para of the intro can be cut down just slightly. Trim a few extraneous words, stick to the details, & you'll be good.
  • I trust you're handling that intro redlink asap.
  • Infobox says "Abeloth" apparently killed."
    • Remnant of the between Allies-Vortex era when we didn't really know what exactly was going on; switched to just "defeated," which Vortex confirms. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:15, December 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • More to come.—Tommy 9281 20:20, December 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • How come the "Aftermath" section doesn't detail Luke's suppression of Taalon and Khai? "When Vestara arrived, Luke did not fall for her ploy, but allowed her to come along anyway as they left the planet in Taalon's shuttle, the Emiax." The entire thing is nicely detailed otherwise, why skimp here?
  • More still.—Tommy 9281 18:07, December 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Just FYI, Jugs wanted me to pass along to any objectors on his nominations that he's currently having computer issues and will respond asap, though it may be several days. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:22, December 14, 2010 (UTC)
    • aye, thanks Tope; I don't have time right now (and I'm currently borrowing a friend's computer) but I'll get to these asap. I get my new laptop on the 23rd, so I'll get to these then at the latest. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:14, December 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:59, December 22, 2010 (UTC)

  • As a preemptive comment—parts of the article may some context-heavy, but I believe the details are necessary to fully understand the events of the mission as well as the characters' motivations behind them. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:27, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • I added the Kenth Hamner picture to the "Aftermath" section since it fit there. Feel free to check it out.--ID-21 Dolphin DolphinJedi(Talk) 03:03, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
    • The Cilghal pic is already right there; that image is unneeded and makes the article's imaging appear too cluttered. 04:46, December 21, 2010 (UTC)