- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Minos Cluster
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 19:15, 29 May 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Towed from FCA through a bunch of THR updates. Delightfully fun.
- Date Archived: 09:30, 7 September 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 1227 words (165 introduction, 740 body, 322 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 1226 words (162 introduction, 740 body, 324 behind the scenes)
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Did a pre-nom review. ;) Very nice work! Imperators II(Talk) 21:16, 31 May 2024 (UTC)- Zed42
(talk) 23:07, 31 May 2024 (UTC) - Lewisr (talk) 04:11, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:51, 23 August 2024 (UTC)- Booply (talk) 18:06, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 09:29, 7 September 2024 (UTC)
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Macaroni
You're currently linking to a disambig page.JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:29, 19 August 2024 (UTC)- Fixed.—spookywillowwtalk 00:54, 20 August 2024 (UTC)
Another Macaroni
"Following its formation in 230 BBY, the Minos Cluster became part of the Occlusion Zone" - this currently reads as if the cluster itself was formed in 230 BBY.- Sorted.—spookywillowwtalk 18:20, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- Not seeing any changes on my end, you might have forgotten to save? Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 08:42, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- Think the edit must've Fandom-timed out or smth since do recall doing last night; re-tweaked.—spookywillowwtalk 19:13, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- Not seeing any changes on my end, you might have forgotten to save? Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 08:42, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- Sorted.—spookywillowwtalk 18:20, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
"certain planetoids in the Prandril system were considered supposedly uninhabited by individuals such as Avar Kriss." - this reads a little awkwardly to me. I'd recommend changing it to something like "Avar Kriss considered certain planetoids in the Prandril system to be [supposedly?] uninhabited," but I wanted to check that still keeps with what's presented in-source.- It is; and from the wording it's made out to be as if it's something she knew, but that other(s) would possibly have known as just general intel available at the time for the system. "Ahead of them, the dimpled surface of a rocky moon crested like a rising sun through the viewport. It was one of a series of apparently uninhabited planetoids in this system."—spookywillowwtalk 18:20, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- Hmm OK. Perhaps something like "Avar Kriss considered certain planetoids in the Prandril system to be apparently uninhabited" or something to that extent? It's a tricky thing to word but I think that gets the point across. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 08:42, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- I do feel as if that makes it sound as if she's the only one who considered such; the wording from the novel does make it sound like she's reflecting on knowledge others would have known at the time. Though awkward, the intent behind why it's phrased 'by individuals such as Avar Kriss' is to leave room for that.—spookywillowwtalk 19:13, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- Hmm OK. Perhaps something like "Avar Kriss considered certain planetoids in the Prandril system to be apparently uninhabited" or something to that extent? It's a tricky thing to word but I think that gets the point across. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 08:42, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
- It is; and from the wording it's made out to be as if it's something she knew, but that other(s) would possibly have known as just general intel available at the time for the system. "Ahead of them, the dimpled surface of a rocky moon crested like a rising sun through the viewport. It was one of a series of apparently uninhabited planetoids in this system."—spookywillowwtalk 18:20, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
According to our Challenge 68 article, the issue was published in January of 1993, when this article only gives the year. If this can be cooborated, do you think the month should be added? I know the date is used for the adventure itself, not the issue, but I still feel that it meets the "part of a series" criteria of the LG.Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 11:03, 5 September 2024 (UTC)- Did check, but there wasn't any reliable source for the month, and the magazine itself didn't have more than the year, so I'd assumed our article wasn't sourced properly as Legends ones tend to be.—spookywillowwtalk 18:20, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Comments
- At some point whenever the OZ inevitably dissolves, it'll get a one-liner update stating such in the History. I don't really consider it unstable due to that though since it'd be super minor.—spookywillowwtalk 19:15, 29 May 2024 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 09:29, 7 September 2024 (UTC)