Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Mebara Jos

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Mebara Jos

  • Nominated by: Jinzler 14:08, January 23, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Never anger a Togorian

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 17:08, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 21:10, February 24, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote --Eyrezer 06:37, March 1, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:43, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 21:03, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Floyd
  • Intro (and also in the bio): "Due to her Force-sensitivity, Jos was shunned by her own people," Why is that? Was that just part of Togorian culture? Clarify.
    • According to Ultimate Alien Anthology, that was indeed a part of Togorian culture. However, there is a degree of uncertainty here, because the sources don't give too much specific info about Jos' background and both Cloak and Vibroblade and CSWE do not specify where her homeworld was, or who were the people she grew up around, or that they were even Togorians. However, C&V does say that she developed a hatred for other Togorians and the entire population of Togoria, thus inferring, but not explicitly stating that she grew up around other Togorians. I decided to err on the side of caution when writing the article, because I didn't want to be accused of unjustifiable assumptions. However, if you think that the evidence I have given above is enough to assume that she did grew up around other Togorians, I'll add in some UAA info about Togorian culture. --Jinzler 15:40, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
      • Well, you already say that she was shunned by her own people, and the way the article reads suggests that Togorians were the ones who shunned her. That coupled with her developing a hatred toward Togorians, it seems pretty safe to say that she was shunned by Togorians. SO I would go ahead and add a little tidbit about it being part of Togorian culture. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 16:53, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
        • Mentioned. --Jinzler 17:06, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • What purpose what recovering Sarain serve? Clarify.
    • Unfortunately, none of the relevant sources give and reason for this. --Jinzler 15:40, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • Linking issues.
    • Should hopefully be fine now. --Jinzler 15:40, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • No quotes in the body?
    • The only other relevant quote is only said if the player characters do a particular action, so I have added this quote to the BTS, and stated about the relevant player actions in the attribution. Another quote could also potentially be obtained from some of the other stuff that is said at the same time as this quote, but it isn't really that good and putting it anywhere other than the BTS would require the use of "RPG" templates in the article, which seems a bit like overkill for a quote that's not actually very interesting. --Jinzler 15:40, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • That's all for now. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:25, January 25, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thank you for taking a look at the article. --Jinzler 15:40, January 26, 2011 (UTC)
Eyrezer
  • "Jos subsequently launched another operation aimed at bringing her revenge, scheming to destroy the luxury liner Queen of Cularin, but her plans were again foiled by the actions of the Heroes of Cularin." Can you please expand on this?
    • Done --Jinzler 19:55, February 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • Can you please use the {{CSWECite}} in the references?
    • Added --Jinzler 19:55, February 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • "However, her first two attempts to have revenge were unsuccessful..." Can you please expand this in the intro? --Eyrezer 10:23, February 23, 2011 (UTC)
    • Done --Jinzler 19:55, February 24, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Question/objection, which would possibly affect the use of the comma in this sentence. Is this saying that the application team also believed that her rage was her reason for enrolling, or is that stating the fact that her rage led her to enroll? "and that rage was her primary motivation for applying to study at the academy" Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:32, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • The source seems to suggest that her rage was her main reason for enrolling, and that the application team easily spotted that. Thanks for your review. --Jinzler 16:12, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
      • With apologies, I fear that I'm still somewhat unclear as to my original question, though it seems that you're saying that the article is intending to read "and in addition the application team believed that rage...," so I've removed the comma from the sentence. If it's the other way around, as in, if it's saying independently that "rage was in fact the reason she joined," feel free to replace it. Good job on the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:43, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 21:03, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Eyrezer, I was wondering what you views are on how I have dated the Jigsaw trilogy to the time of the Clone Wars for the purposes of this article. I ask because Portrait of the Artist as a Young Rodian features the 125th anniversary of the Cularin Compact, which would seemingly date the trilogy to 29 BBY because of the 154 BBY date that the LFCG gives for the Compact. However, this date seems incompatible with the ten year disappearance of the Cularin system in Philology, because the system was not around in 29 BBY, so, given the difficultly reconciling the 29 BBY date with Philology, I therefore chose the Clone Wars date, because that is the timeframe in which all of the other Living Force Year 4 adventures appear to be set. However, I notice that you used the 29 BBY date in the Tynnan article, so which date do you think is correct? --Jinzler 19:55, February 24, 2011 (UTC)

  • Hmm, I will have to dig out my LF adventures to look this one over. I will see what I can do. --Eyrezer 06:37, March 1, 2011 (UTC)