Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Mar Barezz

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Mar Barezz

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Dat Cavalier JangFett (Talk) 19:43, March 28, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Bollocks IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:14, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  3. --Emperor Jarjarkine GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Senate Hall 02:46, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 02:55, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
  5. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 03:00, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:28, July 6, 2014 (UTC)

Object

El Jefe
  • Context on Tensiger?
    • All we know is that Tensiger commanded the 6th Regiment. No sex, no rank, no nothing.
  • Context on COMPNOR?
    • I've eliminated the acronym and kept the full version of the name - enough context or are you looking for something more specific?
  • You don't actually mention that something's going on on Picutorion until, apparently, way into the battle. The timing's off.
    • Well, from Barezz's point of view, he's only interested in that portion of the battle, so that's all the focus that we get in the short narrative.
      • Sure, but sometimes it's necessary to step outside the narrow view of what the character was concerned with to make sure the reader knows exactly what's going on.
  • "Barezz learned that Vanis was planning to escort a group of six new Rebels aboard a shuttle to a secret rendezvous." Is there any timeframe for this?
    • Not really. The incident on Mesa 291 is indicated to occur after Yavin, since the original adventure was featured in the 1st edition of the Roleplaying Game, and the strip mentions that Tiree reckons he can gather the new recruits inside a week after losing the original six. However, the next intended webstrip was to be "Day Long Remembered", the promo art to which seems to show the Death Star killing Alderaan. Because of that, I deliberate kept the dating vague.
  • "Yorta, a former smashball player," How is the smashball thing relevant? Did his smashball experience help him chuck the detonator? Was he a smashball pitcher or something? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:43, June 2, 2014 (UTC)
    • Something like that. He specifically says the smashball skills are relevant in the strip. Clarified somewhat. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:38, June 2, 2014 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Do Barezz, Vanis, or any other individuals hold the formal rank of agent? If so, Agent should be pipelinked somewhere. Just wanted to check since I'm not familiar with the source material.
    • Barezz isn't, and is refered to as "officer." Not sure on Vanis without checking his entire source history, so I've pipelinked it upon first mentions.
  • Would it be possible to standardize the general paragraph size a bit more? In particular, the "Picutorion" paragraph and the first "Mesa 291" paragraph are on the longer side, so you might consider splitting them up.
    • I don't really want to split Picutorion at all; the narrative is a short one, and there's no natural break. Splitting that paragraph into two smaller ones would do more harm than good in my opinion. I split the first Mesa 291 paragraph.
  • "the outer perimeter of an Alliance tracking station": article for this specific facility?
    • It's already linked at tracking station. There's no other mention of a tracking station on the Wook at all, so this article should suffice until we either learn more, or find more reference. Having "Tracking station" and "Tracking station (Picutorion)" for a single mention facility seems overkill, as we don't know if "tracking station" is unique or ubiquitous.
  • "where he found his quarry aboard a relay station in orbit": same for the relay station.
    • Linked to Bothan relay station on second mention.
  • Unless I'm missing something, are there any more event articles that can be liked, like the Aggressor's destruction of the shuttle, the events at Mesa 291, and Vanis's attempt to break into Bandor's palace?
    • Not currently as far as I can tell. I've redlinked two and created the Mesa 291 one since it had to be linked in the intro.
  • Article for Bandor's palace on Questal? CC7567 (talk) 21:21, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
  • "The Bureau shall remember that when it comes time formally assess the loyalty of this crew, Captain." Is that missing a "to"? Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:17, June 28, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:28, July 6, 2014 (UTC)