Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Makezh

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Makezh

  • Nominated by: Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:45, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Sponsored by the people who brought you beer milkshakes!

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. This is excellent, Cavalier. DC 00:13, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Jaina Solo(Talk) 13:15, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Caedus... Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:15, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote I'm becoming rather cavalier about a certain DarkStryder takeover. *rimshot* Don't forget to tip your waiters and waitresses, ladies and gents; I'll be here all weekend. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 17:53, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Weird, weird character. Cull Tremayne 02:20, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 05:04, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the Critique of Jadson:
    • "race of mysterious Force-wielding aliens from the Kathol Rift" This sentence in the body is the exact same as one in the intro. Please remedy.
      • Changed the second instance in the main body.
    • Great job, Cav. This is downright creepy though. Watch out for the Aing-Tii...Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:04, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
      • Yep - those Aing-Tii are indirectly responsible for Darth Caedus too since they taught him to flow-walk. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:48, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "but he was the best Rift navigator on the planet" POV.
      • Altered to "considered to be the best".
    • "d his first clear memory was of waking up in the presence of the Aing-Tii. He then entered a light transport, powered up the vessel," Can we have some context on where this was?
      • There's none given except that it was in the Kathol Rift. The Aing-Tii homeworld is in the Rift, but it could have just as easily been on one of their ships. It's never made clear.
    • "Danoor's scientific community made use of his talents" Could you be a little more specific?
      • Context added.
    • "Shortly after, he began to suffer from headaches." Shortly after his release or shortly after the government scientists met him?
      • Clarified.
    • "He agreed to their help, then realized the danger he was in. The FarStar crewmembers started a rescue attempt." Second sentence doesn't fit well there, and the whole thing is a bit awkward.
      • Removed the second sentence.
    • "After visiting the area with his father," Was his father there, or is he recalling earlier experiences?
      • Clarified.
    • "and an encounter with a ghest," A bit of context would be good.
      • Not much that I can give - the encounter is dealt with by the players, so the encounter can be resolved in several ways.
    • "emerged victorious due to the arrival of an Aing-Tii Sanhedrim ship" What exactly did the Aing-Tii vessel do?
      • Rewritten and clarified.
    • " he got credit for trying" It'd be nice if we knew who gave him this "credit for trying."
      • Context added.
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 23:21, 3 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:02, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

  • The main image sucks a bit, but it's the best I can do with my scanner for some reason. If anyone can grab another version of it, I'd be grateful. It's on page 70 of The Kathol Rift. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:45, 8 August 2008 (UTC)