Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Maarek Stele/Legends

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Maarek Stele

(6 Inqs/1 User/7 total)

Support

1. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:17, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
2. Cull Tremayne 22:03, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
3. Good stuff. Thefourdotelipsis 03:55, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
4. Graestan ^{(This party's over)} 12:51, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
5. I read this a couple days ago and just finished it a little while ago; very nice article. Greyman^(Paratus) 16:54, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
6. ... ^Jorrel _Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
7. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 13:45, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

1. From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
2. *"Maarek Stele was an Emperor's Hand" in the intro—can this be reworded, emphasizing that he's one of the Emperor's Hands?
   • "The only son of Marina and Kerek Stele, his life changed after his father was kidnapped by Bordali agents when Stele was young—the Bordali hoped to make the famous scientist work for them against his own people."—Who the famous scientist is should be addressed.
   • "He became involved with illegal swoop gangs and, as an accomplished swoop bike pilot, began participating, under an alias, in competitions for money, undertaking dangerous stunts among the ruined high-rise buildings on his homeworld."—this is too long, and though you and I could grasp the structure, I'm assuming that most others could not. Can it be broken up?
   • "After three months on the Vengeance, with the Taroon system long since pacified and occupied, Maarek had become quite proficient at flying TIE series starfighters while on maintenance test flights, his swoop experience making him a natural."—likewise.
   • Two sentences later, "assist" is used twice in rapid succession, and feels awkward.
   • That's all for now. - Graestan ^{(This party's over)} 00:27, 14 September 2007 (UTC)
     • Have another look. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 14:36, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
       • Hey, thanks. I was just trying to get you out of the mode I usually fall into, where we write sentences that only people as skilled in linguistics as we are can piece them together without much effort. You've done well. - Graestan ^{(This party's over)} 01:14, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
3. From the lair of Hobbes15
   • Ref the affiliation section of the infobox.
   • In Service Under Thrawn, who was being investigated for treason— Stele or Harkov?
   • Kind of a sudden ending. Is there any info on what happened to Stele and his patrol after that?
   • Bah! Two redlinks! (Just personal preference)
   • Other than that, information overload. Incredible work. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 02:26, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
     • Fixed the infobox and the treason bit. There is no ending to the patrol bit since it's from an RPG scenario and it's up to you. And two redlinks is not a valid objection. :P Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:37, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
       • Sorry about the redlinks :P, I was kind of tired when I read it. That has got to be one of the longest FA noms I've seen in a while. Great job, although the ending bit is kind of annoying. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 01:43, 20 September 2007 (UTC)

• From the desk of Atarumaster88
  • His first combat experience can't be against the freighter/corvette run if he fought off Y-wings and X-wings earlier. Please adjust accordingly.
    • First combat duty. Saving Mordon was unofficial. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:45, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
      • Conceded. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:01, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Combat against Nharwaak is a bit sketchy in detail
    • Expanded a bit. Let me know if you want more. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:44, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
  • In the Zaarin Insurrection section, mention again what Zaarin's offer was for those with ADD.
    • Better? Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:45, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Go through and have it checked for comma errors- I fixed a bunch but quickly tired of it.
  • Similarly, have an AWB go through and check it for redundant links. Mag pulse should also not be capitalized except at the start of sentences; in the body of the sentence mag pulse does not get capitalized unless it is a specific warhead designation. Cf. heat-seeking missile vs. AA-2 Atoll.
    • Fixed the mag pulse bit. Will get somebody to run it through AWB. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:45, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
      • Fixed. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Reword second sentence of Prelude to Endor- it's run-on and choppy.
  • Galactic Gazetter does not appear in Sources or Appearances section.
    • Because it doesn't mention Stele at all. It's just the source for D-34's location. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:45, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
      • That would make brilliant sense then. ;-) Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:01, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Needs an image in P&T/P&A sections.
    • Tough. There are none and the others are more appropriate where they are. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:45, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
      • This is a really out-on-a-limb suggestion, but since we have a trend of portrait shots for infoboxes, would it be possible to get a high-quality portrait cropping of the current image and then move the full-body down to the P&T? Just an idea. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:01, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
        • Jaymach assures me that the image is blown up as much as it's going to get. I don't think we'd be able to get a high-quality portrait version. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 15:51, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
          • Fair enough. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 13:14, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating Day. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 19:12, 20 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 17:29, 26 September 2007 (UTC)