Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Luuke Skywalker

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Luuke Skywalker

  • Nominated by: Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 17:33, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Made you Luuke!

(5 Inqs/4 Users/9 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Well done. I enjoyed reading this. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 20:50, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
  2. "Use the Force, Luuke." -- 1358 (Talk) 17:16, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Great article. Definitely worth a Luuke. Menkooroo 02:22, March 25, 2010 (UTC)
  4. "Luuke, it is your destiny!" To be a FA.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:44, March 25, 2010 (UTC)
  5. This Luukes interesting. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 20:12, March 25, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Awesome work. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:53, March 25, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote—Tommy 9281 00:04, March 26, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:59, March 27, 2010 (UTC)
  9. Inqvote Characters like this made me hate cloning. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:36, March 28, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. http://objection.ytmnd.com
    • Can you mention that the original Luke is a Jedi Knight in the opening paragraph of the bio? It's mentioned in the intro, but not in the main body.
      • Well, the thing is, Luke wasn't a Jedi in ESB. I've slipped in a mention of it in the next section.
    • Should the intro and body both mention that the original Luke is a Human male? I've seen other people request this info in FAN objections, but I'm not entirely sure if it's a requirement or not.
      • I don't think it's really necessary here. I've already listed Luuke as a Human male clone and said that he was an exact duplicate of Luke, so that should imply that the original was a Human male. I haven't seen it used in other clone articles either, like Joruus C'baoth for example.
    • The Galactic Empire isn't mentioned at all outside of the infobox. What is Palpatine the Emperor of? What organization is Thrawn a Grand Admiral in?
      • I've changed "Emperor" to "Galactic Emperor" though the linking remains the same. I've also added links to the Thrawn campaign and the Empire in the sentence concerning Thrawn.
    • Was the technique that C'Baoth used on Pellaeon Memory rub? That's a legitimate question on my part --- if so, it should be linked to, if not, my mistake.
      • I don't know if it was that exact technique, it was never named in the novel. It seems similar but I'm hesitant to link to it. What C'baoth used to erase Pellaeon's memory was more like a mind trick, whereas a memory rub seems more like physically erasing or altering a memory from someone's mind.
    • Maybe a bit of context on Luke's confrontation with the Dark Spirit? Nothing crazy, but the way it currently reads ("his confrontation" rather than "a confrontation he had had") seems like it needs just a bit more.
      • Contextified.
    • Super nitpicky, I know, but --- C'baoth "explained" that whoever won would serve him makes it sound like Luke had no choice in the matter. Maybe "claimed" or something else would work better here?
      • Changed.
    • Second paragraph of Confrontation at Mount Tantiss: Two consecutive sentences begin with "The Clone", and the following one with "The throw". Can you change it up?
      • Changed the second one to "He."
    • Similarly, can you find a synonym for "duel"? It pops up a lot.
      • Varied.
    • The article mentions that Jade struck the clone with a killing blow, but the image looks like she's stabbing him. Is this a discrepancy between the book and the comic? Or if it's a stab, can you mention it and link to Shiak?
      • Turns out there is a discrepancy. I've left it the way it is but added a BtS note.
    • "fulfilling Palpatine's last command to kill Luke Skywalker." --- last command to who?
      • Clarified.
    • Terribly nitpicky stuff. Really well-written, and a fantastic choice of an article to FAN. Also, heads-up: I removed four redundant links to Force-abilities in the copy-edit (were linked to in the bio and again in p&a). Menkooroo 05:45, March 24, 2010 (UTC).
      • Wait, scratch one of those --- "Force push" as a subsection of Telekinesis wasn't previously linked to... because it wasn't previously mentioned. When does the clone display the Force-push ability as distinct from Force-pull? Menkooroo 05:49, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
        • Hah, that was my mistake. You're right, he never uses Force Push. I read one of my notes wrong. Thanks for that, and I appreciate the review. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 17:22, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Toprawa:
    • I understand what is being said here, but the reference is kind of vague. I'm not sure the meaning is as clear as it can be. Please try and tweak the wording a little to clarify that the clone was using Luke's original lightsaber: "as his clone attacked with vicious thrusts of the Jedi's first lightsaber."
      • I clarified it in the previous sentence.
    • The article should specify that the clone is using Luke's original lightsaber here. You might want to go into a little more detail here than the space in the introduction affords you: "At C'baoth's command, the clone, dressed in a brown robe and concealed by the light of a hologram next to him, unclipped his lightsaber"
      • Clarified.
    • IIRC, this unveiling causes some kind of emotional reaction in Skywalker. Please elaborate a little bit if so: "and the clone finally revealed his face to the Jedi."
      • Elaborated.
    • There are number of mentioned-only items in the Appearances. Have you thoroughly checked each one to make sure is no further information that can be gleaned from them? Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:21, March 25, 2010 (UTC)
      • I've checked each of them, they're all basically throw-away mentions. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 21:39, March 25, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 12:48, March 29, 2010 (UTC)

  • Just one note: As I was reminded by Toprawa, when there are only two people speaking, {{Quote}} should be used instead of {{Dialogue}}. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 20:55, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • Ah, I suspected that but I wasn't sure. Thanks for the clarification. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 21:05, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
  • Is there an article for the duel? Menkooroo 05:45, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
    • Not that I could find, I'll create one and link it to the article but it may take some time. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 17:22, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
      • Alright, here it is. I decided to make an article for the entire mission since the duel was basically just a part of it. It's pretty rough though. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 18:45, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
        • Cool new image of Luuke! Menkooroo 02:22, March 25, 2010 (UTC)