- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Kren Blista-Vanee
- Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:21, 28 May 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Thought I was overdue one.
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Support
Well done. Grand Moff Tranner 
(Comlink) 11:07, 29 May 2009 (UTC)- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 11:35, 3 June 2009 (UTC) - Graestan(Talk) 14:13, 7 June 2009 (UTC)
- — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:37, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
- Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 16:39, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
Object
While Blista-Vanee and the others were stationed aboard the Death Star, it was destroyed by the Alliance to Restore the Republic in the Battle of Endor. - This sentence at the end of the bio implies that Blista-Vanee died aboard the Death Star; since there is no date of death listed in the infobox, or in the intro, I can only assume the Blista-Vanee's fate is currently unknown. Please reword appropriate to avoid confusion.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:28, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
- Well, I worded it like that on purpose. We don't know definitively Blista-Vanee died, but we pretty much know he did, if you know what I mean. The wording suggests he did without stating it outright. I've done the same sort of thing on Gwellib Ap-Llewff. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 09:51, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
- He either died or he didn't. If it's never explicitly stated, then it's not our place to imply it. You can just say that "The Death Star was later destroyed by the Alliance to Restore the Republic in the Battle of Endor." instead of saying he was on it while it happened. Darth Trayus (Trayus Academy) 02:00, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
- CSWE tells us he was stationed on the Death Star during the Battle of Endor. And the article doesn't say he was on it, just that he was stationed there, which doesn't necessarily preclude the possibility that he somehow escaped. Therefore, I don't see any problem with what's there. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:14, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
- I understand what you mean here, but the wording and continuation of the sentence does imply death, which is speculation. Can you slightly rewrite it, along the lines of: "While Blista-Vanee and the others were stationed aboard the Death Star, it was attacked by the Alliance to Restore the Republic. During the engagement, the battlestation was destroyed." This gives much the same meaning, but by splitting into two sentences, the assumption of death is muted somewhat, giving rising to the possibility that he did escape since his fate is unknown. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 09:53, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
- That's a reasonable change, and it makes sense; done. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:18, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, Acky. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 11:35, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, Acky. - Cavalier One
- That's a reasonable change, and it makes sense; done. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:18, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
- I understand what you mean here, but the wording and continuation of the sentence does imply death, which is speculation. Can you slightly rewrite it, along the lines of: "While Blista-Vanee and the others were stationed aboard the Death Star, it was attacked by the Alliance to Restore the Republic. During the engagement, the battlestation was destroyed." This gives much the same meaning, but by splitting into two sentences, the assumption of death is muted somewhat, giving rising to the possibility that he did escape since his fate is unknown. - Cavalier One
- CSWE tells us he was stationed on the Death Star during the Battle of Endor. And the article doesn't say he was on it, just that he was stationed there, which doesn't necessarily preclude the possibility that he somehow escaped. Therefore, I don't see any problem with what's there. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:14, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
- He either died or he didn't. If it's never explicitly stated, then it's not our place to imply it. You can just say that "The Death Star was later destroyed by the Alliance to Restore the Republic in the Battle of Endor." instead of saying he was on it while it happened. Darth Trayus
- Well, I worded it like that on purpose. We don't know definitively Blista-Vanee died, but we pretty much know he did, if you know what I mean. The wording suggests he did without stating it outright. I've done the same sort of thing on Gwellib Ap-Llewff. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 09:51, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
- From the Desk of Atarumaster88
"content to backstab whoever was necessary to quell any discontent with his leader" A bit unclear here, can you clarify what you mean?- Clarified.
Is there supposed to be content on 3 ABY before 0 BBY? The timeframe seems a little weird here.- Removed the confusing reference to 0 BBY.
- That's all. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 17:54, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:00, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:39, 15 June 2009 (UTC)