Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Krayt

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Krayt

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 15:37, 16 April 2023 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Kenobi season 2 when
• Date Archived: 00:25, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
• Final word count: 1411 words (195 introduction, 1124 body, 92 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Novels, Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Galaxy's Edge

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Support

1. Very interesting read. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:36, 16 June 2023 (UTC)
2. Lewisr (talk) 21:19, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
3. SkiffGuardCaptain (talk) 07:05, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
4. —spookywilloww^talk 00:42, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
5. Fan26 (Talk) 00:03, 4 August 2023 (UTC)
6. Tomotron^{Sith Council} 09:53, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
7. There were several links to Legends articles throughout the prose, so something to be mindful of. Otherwise, nice work! Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 08:51, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
8. AmazinglyCool (talk) 23:10, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
9. Great work! Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:42, 6 September 2023 (UTC)
10. Congratulations on this article. Whether you add audio files or not, I'll support this article :). Marvacian Archivist (talk) 16:10, 6 September 2023 (UTC)

Object

Marvac

• (Review Note): Be careful when using own. For example, you don't have to say "their own pen." You can instead say "their pen" and it would still mean the same thing. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:14, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
• Please check comma usage in the intro of your article, particularly the first paragraph. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:14, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done
• I think its important to state that Kenobi is a fugitive. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:14, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done
    • Unless I missed it, I can't see Kenobi being stated as a fugitive. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:12, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
      • Sorry never mind, just found it. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:13, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
• Please rewrite this sentence in your intro "Krayt began eating one of the Tusken's animals each night, and, after devouring every one of the creatures, moved on to targeting the village's children." as I think the last part of the sentence should be worded to "it moved on to targeting the village's children." Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:14, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done, for future reference a tiny change like this is worth handling by yourself
    • Thanks! Will keep this in mind. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:12, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
• The bts will need an expansion to include the fact that the illustration of the Krayt Dragon was done to "try and depict how an in-world artist might interpret space tales that have been passed down across the galaxy, and like a game of telephone, by the time the stories reach the artist, they are pure myth and fantasy." Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:14, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done, FYI it's a good idea to mention which source you're quoting for objections like this. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:01, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
    • Sorry, forgot to add what source I was quoting from. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:12, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
• Please state the colour of the dragons wings in the "Personality and traits" section. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:16, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Based on the lighting in the image there's no reason to assume that the wings are different from the rest of Krayt's skin
• Please also state in your bts that the legends were imagined to have been told to young kids on Tatooine, Naboo and elsewhere. It's in this source (https://www.starwars.com/news/16-star-wars-books-for-children). Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:16, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done
• You will need to state the colour of its eyes. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:22, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done
• Context for Tusken Raiders. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:28, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
  • I think establishing them as a tribe is enough
• Context for Loth-wolf. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:28, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
  • This might just be me being lazy but I think having wolf in the name provides its own context. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:52, 19 August 2023 (UTC)

AC

• Since it's crucial to the questionable in-universe canonicity of the tale, you should also briefly mention that the story of Krayt was a legend in the intro, not just in the body. AmazinglyCool (talk) 17:13, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Done Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:35, 1 September 2023 (UTC)

Anil

• This was such a good read! I have just one nitpick, could you please also mention the creature's mouth features like its fangs and pointy tongue? Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 16:13, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
  • Done Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:12, 6 September 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:24, 7 September 2023 (UTC)

• Is it possible to add audio files to the quotes in the article? Marvacian Archivist (talk) 07:10, 6 September 2023 (UTC)