Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Keto

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Keto

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:09, July 2, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Satal's daddy. Only 1,005 words; be nice.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Added a couple of words. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 03:19, July 2, 2010 (UTC)
2. NAYAYEN:TALK 08:05, July 2, 2010 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 16:27, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
4. Xicer9^(Combadge) 01:15, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
5. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 14:03, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
6. Pending Tommy's objections being corrected. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 02:15, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
7. Ended at 1,047.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 00:34, July 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Moffship

• You list 3,997 BBY as his date of death in the infobox, but in the rest of the article, you seem to imply that he survived the carbon-freezing process.
  • Addressed.
    • This should also be clarified in the intro.
      • Done.
• Good job. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 14:56, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 16:24, July 3, 2010 (UTC)

Xicer

• Intro: In the last sentence, you should add that the Iron Citadel became the Satal and Aleema's headquarters. It adds more weight to the idea of him being hung as a decoration by his own flesh and blood.
  • Addressed.
    • I meant that it should be added to the intro. The implication was already clear in the Bio, but it's still not there in the intro. Xicer9^(Combadge) 01:05, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
      • My bad. I didn't see the "Intro:" in your objection.
• Keto's species and gender are never mentioned outside of the infobox.
  • Addressed.
    • I'd like to see it in the Bio too, since now you have info exclusive to intro and infobox. Sorry, I should have said that the first time. Xicer9^(Combadge) 01:05, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
      • No need to apologize. Done.
• Bio: "Lord Keto employed torture droids during his rule." This sentence seems out of place with the surrounding sentences. In the sentence before this you talk about Keto being forced to share power with the owners of the carbonite mines, and in the sentence after this you begin talking about Keto making an inspection tour of one of the carbonite smelters. The torture droid sentence has nothing to do with either, and I think the two carbonite sentences would flow perfectly back-to-back. It would probably be best to remove this sentence entirely, since you already mention his use of torture droids in the P&T, and that's really the only place I feel it has relevance.
  • Addressed.
• Coolness! There's got to be only a handful of non-Lost Tribe TotJ era characters left by now. Xicer9^(Combadge) 03:20, July 4, 2010 (UTC)
  • There's actually quite a few left, but I'll get 'em. :P IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:56, July 9, 2010 (UTC)

The scare floor will be...painted?

• I'd suggest simply removing the torture droids bit from the body, leaving it in P&T, where it fits better IMO.
  • Addressed.
• Please mention the fact that he made backroom deals with carbonite companies in the body.
  • Addressed.
• I'd suggest adding a line in the body about how his indifference to his son and niece led them to form the Krath. It would fit at the end of the first paragraph.
  • Addressed.
• Good. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 14:33, July 8, 2010 (UTC)
• Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:56, July 9, 2010 (UTC)

Blacklist:

• Underlinking, the most obvious to me is the missing Tetan Monarchy link from the body.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 02:04, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Linked.
• "While the Ketos and Bearus exchanged pleasantries, they received word that a royal ship containing Satal and Aleema Keto, their tutor Korus, and four others had docked at the smelting plant." Did this actually happen in the comic, or the audio?
  • Yes, it happens in the comic. The Ketos and Bearus are saying hello, and then a guy says "Chairman! Another royal ship is docking... carrying royal tutor Korus and six students."
• "Keto and the others took it as no matter…" If I recall correctly, Lord Keto made a point of expressing his disapproval of Satal and Aleema's arrival.
  • Addressed.
• More later.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 02:04, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
• You need to specify the differences between the audio and the comic in the BtS.
  • Addressed.
• That's all.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 23:09, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:27, July 21, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:34, July 21, 2010 (UTC)