Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Keshiri (redux review)

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Keshiri (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ Meeting 54. Reason: Doubled in size with over 30 kb of new info added following an update.
  • Date added: December 16, 2012
  • Changes since last review: diff

(3 Inqs/1 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 15:35, April 11, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:37, April 15, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 23:53, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
  4. --Eyrezer (talk) 10:03, May 7, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cadeth
  • A relatively large issue: the Society and Culture section is still operating under the assumption that Abeloth was the Destructor, when the History section has incorporated the more recent fact that the Protectors and Destructors were the Jedi and Dark Jedi who visited Kesh and later became the Doomed. The Society and Culture section needs to be revised to reflect our now-accurate knowledge of the Protectors and Destructors, though I think a mention of Abeloth is appropriate.
  • A relinking of the article should probably be in order.
  • I'll continue once these have been addressed. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 17:42, February 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • I don't see the contradiction in "Society and culture"; the article says the Jedi concluded Abeloth was the Destructor, not that she actually was the Destructor. Perhaps I should move that part to "History," though, to make it clearer. Would that work? Also, can you specify if anything more about linking is messed up? It looks fine to me. I did a sweep and found some stuff, but I may have missed something. Thanks, ~SavageBOB sig 15:33, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
      • Yeah, I think that the Abeloth stuff should be moved to the History section; maybe to the "Origins and Skyborn" section, just after the "... their legends spoke of a Great Calamity brought about by a conflict between god-like entities known as the Protectors and the Destructors." Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:20, April 1, 2013 (UTC)
        • Sorry for the delay. I moved her even further down that that, so let me know what you think. ~SavageBOB sig 14:00, April 6, 2013 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • In the second-to-last paragraph of Society and culture, there are two consecutive [2] references. Please rectify. 1358 (Talk) 23:39, March 9, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done, thanks. ~SavageBOB sig 15:26, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • With the recent revelations from the Doomed storyline, are there articles for the specific bands of Jedi and Dark Jedi who fought the Great Cataclysm?
  • Okay, the Dark Jedi are Dark Jedi, but Dreypa is a Sith Lord? And how does he fit into the Jedi-Dark Jedi battle? And later, he is identified just as a Dark Jedi.
  • Dreypa is never explicitly mentioned as being set free.
  • How did Spinner know about the Last Hope if the Doomed were dead?
  • to eliminate Abeloth, a powerful dark side being residing in the Maw - should this be altered to reflect the subsequent revelations of Abeloth's history as presented earlier in the article? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:18, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • The characters in the OS are pretty loose with using "Dark Jedi" and "Sith" interchangeably, but I've tried to clarify the best I could. Dreypa explicitly calls himself a Sith Lord at one point, so I've used that for him. I think the rest of your objections should be addressed. Thanks for taking a look! ~SavageBOB sig 14:30, April 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • One more minor thing: The image caption for File:Duel near Omen.jpg says: "Adari Vaal fled into exile after witnessing a duel between two of the Skyborn." This isn't entirely accurate. She was fleeing into exile before witnessing the duel, and was accepted back after bringing the Skyborn back to the Keshiri. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:00, April 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • I see what you mean. I changed the caption and moved the picture up to where that incident is discussed in the text. How's it look? ~SavageBOB sig 11:16, April 11, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • One thing: would you be able to standardize paragraph size a bit, mostly by breaking up some of the longer ones? In particular, the "Reunited" ones are rather long. CC7567 (talk) 23:39, April 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done. Take a look. And thanks for the review! ~SavageBOB sig 13:14, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
Eyrezer
  • I think you need to say what the Pool of Knowledge is in the second last paragraph of the "Into the galaxy" subsection of History. It is introduced here with no context.
  • Similarly, I do not know what the events on the moon Pydyr are. If there are not relevant to the Keshari, I suggest rewording to avoid the reference; otherwise, you need to provide some further context. --Eyrezer (talk) 01:57, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • Both clarified. Thanks for the review! ~SavageBOB sig 14:14, May 3, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:34, May 7, 2013 (UTC)