Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Kea Moll

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Kea Moll

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:28, May 15, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Artoo? You look lovely.

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Wonder if that hair is natural. ~SavageBOB sig 17:18, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Bringing together comfort, safety and design. Kia. The power to surprise. Menkooroo 11:48, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Fantastic.—Tommy 9281 Sunday, July 24, 2011, 23:58 UTC
  4. Inqvote "...using the spare time that farm life left her to practice her flying..." Spare time? Sounds like no farm I've ever heard of. --Eyrezer 10:43, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:39, August 12, 2011 (UTC)
  6. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 14:00, August 12, 2011 (UTC)

Object

The power to surprise
  • Can you call the Trigon One something other than a starship in the intro? Something to invoke a feeling of why it needs to be destroyed?
  • Any reason why she's referred to her by her first name throughout the first Bio subsection? It seems like an attempt to distinguish her from her parents, but later sections call her "Moll" while using "Demma" for her mother. I don't think it would be confusing if you stuck with "Moll" throughout. Thoughts?
    • Yes, that was the reason. Yes, it works with surname. Changed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:45, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • "After R2-D2 infiltrated the base using a decoy" --- a decoy what? How did it help him infiltrate the base?
    • They don't say. Removed the decoy reference entirely. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:45, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • A little nitpicky, but during the climax of The White Witch stuff, the word "directed" is used both for Kea's actions concerning moving traffic using the computer, and communicating directions to Joben. The consistency kind of makes it seem like she uses the computer to control Joben and the Witch. Can you explicitly state that she communicates with Joben via comlink? Menkooroo 14:18, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • In "Return to Annoo," Kea and Thall get into two cargo containers, but they're repeatedly described as being in a single container later in the section. Is it one or two?
    • Both. It's one thing with two compartments. 3PO uses the plural though, so I've changed them all to that. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:39, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  • "Strong Arm droid" is only used in an image caption --- should it find its way into the article body?
    • It's linked but security droid fits in better. I've changed the image caption instead. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:39, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  • Is the Trigon a superweapon? If it is, I feel like that should be pipelinked somewhere.
    • Pass. Tig talks up its destructive power but I've never seen a source identify it as one. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:39, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  • I've noticed at least one case of R2-D2 being referred to as an "it;" per this CT, "he" should be used.
    • Changed one "its" to "his." Can't find any more but let me know if I missed any. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:39, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
  • Really good job. Droids for the win. :) Menkooroo 06:42, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged…
  • I'll get into a larger review later, but for now, her skin color should be added to the infobox.
  • The white streak in her hair should be mentioned in the "hair" field in her infobox, too.
  • This information should be added to P&T, along with eye color, so there's no infobox-specific info. ~SavageBOB sig 00:08, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • In the first sentence of the third paragraph of the lead, the antecedent of they isn't clear. I think you mean Moll and her crew, but it's a bit unclear.
  • Can you clarify the relationship between the Rebel Alliance and the New Republic in the last sentence of the lead?
  • "and she was soon fully acquainted with its systems" --> Can you reframe this a bit? The soon in particular is a bit confusing; do you mean soon after she started working on it? Is this soon as in days or years or what?
  • "Moll and C-3PO redirected the security droids to clear a path, but as they headed to rendezvous with the others, they encountered two security droids outside the control room." There's a similar antecedent issue with the they here. I think you mean Moll, 3PO, and R2, but can you clarify?
  • Maybe an article for the guard who captured Moll on Annoo? I suppose this goes for the other random guards too.
    • Linked this one since he has a speaking part. I think there's only one other guard identified individually in the article and I'm a little reluctant to make an article for him as the guards are all clones and that one doesn't actually say anything. I can if you insist. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:07, June 25, 2011 (UTC)
      • Some folks would want articles for any on-screen character, but I'll let you off the hook. ;) ~SavageBOB sig 03:18, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • "After arriving on Ingo, the droids found..." This sentence gets a bit bogged down, especially before Vlix is introduced. Could you perhaps break in into two or rearrange the clauses? More to come! ~SavageBOB sig 06:18, June 25, 2011 (UTC)
  • More! Context on Strato Driver?
    • Don't really know what context to give for a class of ship. Since the class isn't really important, I've left the link to Strato Driver but changed the link text to just starship. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:36, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
      • Ah, OK. I didn't realize it was a ship. ~SavageBOB sig 17:18, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
  • The junkyard probably deserves an article.
  • Is she not mentioned in the the third edition of A Guide to the Star Wars Universe? ~SavageBOB sig 03:18, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
Parseltongue
  • "After arriving on Ingo, the droids found the containers with the two Humans." Is this their return to the planet? That's all, not bad.—Tommy 9281 Friday, July 8, 2011, 22:44 UTC
    • Previous Annoo should have been an Ingo. Should make sense now. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:38, July 9, 2011 (UTC)
Cav
  • Just a quick one - the refs for Date of birth and Gender seem to be reversed; the explanation for the birthdate is currently reffing the Gender field. Can you check and rectify? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:38, August 3, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:20, August 13, 2011 (UTC)

From Databank title Fett, Boba in the Databank (original site is defunct), Among the first records of Fett's activities were during the early years of the Empire. Fett was hired by the gangster Sise Fromm to dispose of young speeder pilot Thall Joben and his friends. An indirect mention? Your call. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:58, May 15, 2011 (UTC)