Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Katuunko/Legends

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Katuunko

• Nominated by:Darth Trayus ^{(Trayus Academy)} 04:45, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:This took me way longer than it should have.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)

Support

1. CC7567 ^(talk) 02:53, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
2. —Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 00:13, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:48, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
4. Good, easy reading. —Xwing328^(Talk) 04:32, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
5. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 00:30, 27 June 2009 (UTC)
6. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:52, 1 July 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Attack of the Clone
   • I'm unsure if "Jedi negotiator" is the best choice for context for Yoda; it might be better to state that he was the Grand Master, because I don't believe a negotiator was his official title.
     • Changed.
   • The intro can be expanded a bit more, re: Katuunko's reaction to the events taking place on Rugosa.
     • Expanded a bit.
   • I don't believe it was specifically stated in Prelude that Katuunko was hesitant to join the Confederacy; this needs a different source.
     • Resourced.
   • "The Chancellor agreed; however, Katuunko was still unwilling to negotiate unless the Republic emissary was a member of the Jedi Order": a bit awkward wording, because it wasn't stated specifically that this was also a reason Katuunko did not originally wish to negotiate with the Republic; it seemed to be more of an added request.
     • Reworked.
   • "Interrupt" is a bit awkward word choice; yes, Ventress did indeed interrupt negotiations between Katuunko and the Republic, but I don't believe that it was her real purpose.
     • Fixed.
   • Why did Katuunko protest the contest?
     • Specified.
   • "Ventress received regular updates on the mission from her droid commander, OOM-224, while Master Yoda would periodically contact the King. Katuunko repeatedly debated with Ventress on the likelihood of Yoda's success, angering her until she eventually destroyed his communicator with her bare hand." These sentences overall is rather broadened instead of being centered to the specific events.
     • While I agree that it is vague, adding in specifically what Yoda and OOM-224 reported on would only add to the dialogue issue you point out in your next objection.
   • I'm noticing that the dialogue is just a bit excessive; try to see if you can cut it down a bit.
     • See above. And if this objection stands, can you point out exactly where?
   • Specifically when did Ventress break the terms of the competition?
     • Specified.
       • I believe it was specifically when Ventress ordered the droidekas to reinforce the tanks; I added it in. CC7567 ^(talk) 02:53, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
   • Can it be stated earlier that Ventress was a Dark Acolyte?
     • In the intro and first section.
   • "as he wished to see a show of both force and faith from the Confederacy and Republic": "force and faith" are a bit awkward wording; also, it's unclear why he wanted to see faith, because he wasn't yet allied with the Republic or the Confederacy.
     • The faith part was in his databank entry, and unspecified. I've ommitted it for now.
   • Looks fine otherwise. CC7567 ^(talk) 06:00, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
     • Thank you. :) Darth Trayus ^{(Trayus Academy)} 02:38, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
2. Blacklist:
   • Now I would normally fix this, but I'd like you to familiarize yourself with proper quote templates. Please properly format the lead quote of the Negotiations on Rugosa section. If you need assistance (after trying on your own), I will help you.
     • Yeah I could use some help. I can do regular quotes and dialogues between two people but three or more confuses the crap out of me.
   • You mention nowhere in the article anything about the Toydarian royal delegation.
     • Its in there now.
   • No link for the ceremonial Toydarian sword? If not, the creation of a stub would suffice.
     • Got one.
   • Otherwise, good work.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 15:32, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus ^{(Trayus Academy)} 23:14, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
       • Anytime.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 00:13, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Thanks to Enochf for properly formatting that quote.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 00:13, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 10:52, 1 July 2009 (UTC)