Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jas Emari

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Jas Emari

  • Nominated by:--Doctor StarwarsTalk 03:05, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I recently got feedback that my Norra Wexley page wasn't going to work, but then I noticed this one. I think it's perfect for an FA.

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Toqgers
  • A few additional quotes, particularly a leading quote at the beginning of the article would be good (and audio if possible, but not required) Toqgers (talk) 03:36, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • As with quotes some additional images would be great. Images of Sinjir, the Halo, Temmin, Norra, Sloane etc. Temmin Wexley and Rae Sloane both have images on them that can illustrate people and events Jas was also involved with, for starters. Toqgers (talk) 03:36, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Thanks. Will be adding the quotes soon.--Doctor StarwarsTalk 21:01, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • Alright! I finally finished. Are the pictures and quotes enough, or do you want me to add more?--Doctor StarwarsTalk 01:00, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
        • I made a few small tweaks to the captions, but otherwise images look awesome. Maybe a picture of Han or Kashyyyk for the mission to Kashyyyk stuff? There's a pretty big gap between images there and those both definitely have pictures that can be used Toqgers (talk) 02:49, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
          • I agree. I'll be doing so. Thanks!--Doctor StarwarsTalk 02:50, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
            • I finished with the pictures! Is there anything else you'd like me to do?--Doctor StarwarsTalk 03:01, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
  • (Reviewing note) Please use underscores instead of spaces when formatting file names. e.g. "Jas_Emari.png" instead of "Jas Emari.png."
  • Redlinks.
  • Duplicate links. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 13:39, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note) Per the Layout Guide, image caption punctuation (i.e., a full stop, or period) is determined by whether the caption uses a complete sentence. Example: "Luke Skywalker, Jedi Knight" does not receive a full stop, whereas "Luke Skywalker was a Jedi Knight." does. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 13:37, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
Spooky
  • The BtS is unsourced.
  • "By 5 ABY, Jas found herself heavily indebted to several underworld creditors." - 5 ABY should be referenced with the novel's dating note, as it can't be directly found in the book.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 14:48, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the feedback, I did so.--Doctor StarwarsTalk 20:32, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • I don't see that you've done either. The "Behind the scenes" section has no references still. Additionally, just 'By 5 ABY' needs to be tied to the date reference. As it is now, all sections that point to Life Debt also include it, which isn't necessary.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 23:44, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
        • Sorry about that. I did it now. I added the sources 'by 5 ABY' and I sourced the BtS. Is that it, or is there something else I should work on? Please let me know. Thanks!--Doctor StarwarsTalk 00:52, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
          • Hmm. In the BtS, I would recommend citing each sentence to the respective source it needs to point to, rather than just putting all three at the end, as a matter of general practice.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:01, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
  • In the first sentence, listing the gender after the species is preferred.
  • You don't need to link to Color twice in the infobox. The top one is enough. Fan26 (Talk) 19:40, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • In the P/T section, you use a non-neutral tone a few times. Examples include phrasing such as "Machiavellian methods" and "still had a good moral compass". Unless Life Debt, which their paragraphs are reffed to, directly describe her this way (something I highly doubt for the phrase machiavellian), you should remove this. In general, just try to group examples of a specific trait together and let them stand on their own as describing Jas as a person. Fan26 (Talk) 18:10, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
    • The specific examples I mentioned have been removed, but there are still many instances in the P/T where it feels full of your observations on her character (obvious as some may be). Fan26 (Talk) 17:52, November 5, 2019 (UTC)
  • Also from the P/T: I believe her ability to regenerate cranial horns belongs in the Skills and abilities section. Fan26 (Talk) 18:13, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
  • According to the infobox, Aftermath claims Emari's skin is moonlight-blue, but all available pictures show her as having a light shade of skin. I feel like this contradiction should be mentioned in the BTS. Zed42 (talk) 01:40, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
    • Did it!:)--Doctor StarwarsTalk 01:51, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
      • You'll need to directly mention the sources of those images, referencing each source separately, rather than just making a general statement. Zed42 (talk) 19:49, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
        • I finished it!--Doctor StarwarsTalk 00:16, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
          • I meant that you should mention both No Disintegrations and Women of the Galaxy, and the references for each should be separate, rather than placed together at the end of the paragraph. Zed42 (talk) 07:50, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Although No Disintegrations and Ultimate Star Wars, New Edition are listed in the sources, I'm not seeing any information in the article body sourced to them. Please go through those sources and see if any information is missing. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 09:46, November 2, 2019 (UTC)
  • So just to confirm, you do have access to all the appearances and sources, and have checked through the article to make sure all information is correct? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 10:36, November 4, 2019 (UTC)
  • Yes, sir! Its all done!--Doctor StarwarsTalk 14:19, November 4, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

  • Everything has been checked.--Doctor StarwarsTalk 03:05, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • I'll be working on all the objections! Thank you!--Doctor StarwarsTalk 16:15, November 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • Just a note, don't strike objections from other users when you think you've made the changes they want. Only the objector themselves can strike their objection if they're satisfied. Zed42 (talk) 21:11, November 1, 2019 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Unaddressed objection by Fan26, over two weeks old. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:13, November 20, 2019 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:15, November 20, 2019 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 18:15, November 20, 2019 (UTC)