Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jaldine Gerams

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Jaldine Gerams

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:18, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Hope its confirmed at some point that Gerams, Raner, and Tobber actually survived
  • Date Archived: 23:56, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1079 words (185 introduction, 768 body, 126 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1086 words (189 introduction, 771 body, 126 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 21:25, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
  2. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:03, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 15:45, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 15:32, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
  5. Wok142 (talk) 18:26, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 23:55, 15 April 2024 (UTC)

Object

spookly
  • Just the smallest, most minor thing. First usage of Gerams' pronouns are different than the infobox; would be best if consistent.—spookywillowwtalk 20:43, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
Uber
  • You have a duplicate reference in the very first Biography paragraph. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:56, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
Lew
  • The affiliations field is unsourced Lewisr (talk) 05:12, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Similar to as on Barion Raner, if Jaldine was born on Fresia, should be noted in the birth field Lewisr (talk) 05:12, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
    • No source explicitly says born on, just homeworld, native to, or from, so I've changed the wording on this and the Fresia article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:52, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
      • Thanks for checking that! Lewisr (talk) 15:45, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
Tommy
  • As had been discussed on Constrainer, we're moving away from assuming starship classes, so the Persecutor being an ISD I needs a source. That page sources Ultimate Star Wars, New Edition so that'll be worth checking.
    • Ah yeah, this came up for Persecutor on Casido as well. Thought I'd gone through and changed it for the relevant articles but must have forgotten the Blue Squadron pilots. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:25, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
  • I'm not a fan of the section heading "The few Blue." First, I'm a bit unsure what it means to be honest, does "Blue" just mean Blue Squadron pilots? I'm also unsure whether "Blue" should be capitalised and pluralised. So I think it causes a few too many issues than it's worth. How would you feel about changing it?
    • Looking at it again, the heading also unintentionally sounds like it has some weird blue lives matter overlap that I hadn't considered before. It was indeed meant to be about the few Blue Squadron members stuck outside the gate, but switched it out to avoid any of the issues. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:25, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
      • Heh, yeah I hadn't thought of that, that looks good now. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 15:32, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
  • I've added a link to Wikipedia:Gimbal; however, their spelling differs from the article's, which uses "gimble." Looking around, gimbal does appear to be the more common spelling. Did you use the original spelling because of the video's subtitles or something? If not, I'd suggest changing it to the more common spelling. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 14:25, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
    • I think it was based on the subtitles yeah, but since it isn't a direct quote I'm happy to go with the more common spelling. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:25, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • First sentence in the third paragraph of the intro, I would say split it into two sentences like so: "During the battle, Gerams sounded the alarm when an additional wave of TIE fighters launched from the Shield Gate. She later fired proton torpedoes into the gate in an unsuccessful effort to destroy it." Otherwise it kind of reads like the TIEs are the ones firing the torpedoes. Wok142 (talk) 19:45, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
  • I feel like it should be explicitly stated that Gerams survived at the end of the biography section. Wok142 (talk) 19:45, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
    • We don't know if she survived or not. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:40, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
      • Oh my bad haha. Wok142 (talk) 18:26, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
  • In the last sentence of Behind the scenes, should "manages" be changed to past-tense? Wok142 (talk) 19:45, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
ThrawnChiss
  • What is the purpose of the External link? Per the WP:LG, ELs that "cover only a fraction of the article's subject should not be included in the External links." ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 18:33, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
    • It's the only source of a unique image of the character so I think it's beneficial to readers to have a link so that the image can be easily located, otherwise it's likely to be lost if the webpage goes down. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:04, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
      • I agree that it useful, but it is currently against the wording of policy. Perhaps the policy should be amended to allow for such instances. ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 21:49, 15 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:55, 15 April 2024 (UTC)