Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jace Dallin (redux review)

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Jace Dallin (redux review)

  • Redux comments: Reduxed per INQ meeting 44. Underwent a thorough and complete copy-edit to update it from 2007 to 2011 standards.
  • Date added: September 12, 2011
  • Changes since last review: diff

(3 Inqs/1 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:49, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 03:16, November 8, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 22:45, November 9, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Looks good other than that uncapitalized human. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:19, November 10, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Clone
  • Ideally, the article should be referenced with specific comic issues, not with general story arcs. Not covered by policy, but I'd appreciate it if you humor me. I'll start combing through once this is fixed. CC7567 (talk) 01:10, September 5, 2012 (UTC)
    • Finally got this one done. Sorry for the delay. Menkooroo (talk) 12:30, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • Intro: is there an article for the ambush to be linked to?
    • Yes! First Battle of Qotile. Pipelinked.
  • I'm confused; the article says the fleet made it to Troiken, but the battle articles refer to Qotile - can you clear this up? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:21, October 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Due to a suspicion that those aren't actually the canonical names of the battles, I've removed the mention of Qotile and pipelinked it to just say "the battle" instead. I'll follow up on that and check the NEC and stuff for name confirmation. Menkooroo (talk) 09:39, October 10, 2012 (UTC)
      • Can't find any references to those as canonical names. They seem to be conjectural titles that Kuralyov gave the articles back when they were created in 2005. As such, the word "Qotile" now doesn't appear in this article at all. Menkooroo (talk) 14:05, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
The Attack
  • Anything more for the P&T? Seems extremely scant. Nothing there from the Battle of Rendili, in particular, but other source material should also be checked. CC7567 (talk) 00:16, November 3, 2012 (UTC)
    • Expanded with stuff from Rendili, Loyalties, and Stark.
  • "As a former officer in the Judicial Forces and a senior-ranking veteran of the largest conflict in recent memory": can this connection (of his position being due to his service in the "largest conflict in recent memory") be attributed to the comic? I don't remember it being stated there. CC7567 (talk) 00:20, November 3, 2012 (UTC)
    • I checked, and it can't. Changed it to just say "in the Stark Hyperspace War." Thanks for reviewing this guy and Sagoro. Menkooroo (talk) 11:44, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
      • Apologies. Thanks for clarifying that too about the "largest conflict in recent memory," but what I meant to ask was whether his career up unto that point (serving in the Judicial Forces and being a veteran of the war) was a direct cause for his promotion to "commander of the entire Home Defense Fleet." What I'm trying to get at is that the comic didn't necessarily state how or why he was became the fleet commander, while the article assumes that this is what happened. Although it might be a reasonable assumption, I wanted to make sure that you're comfortable presenting it that way with the current wording. CC7567 (talk) 20:15, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
        • Ah, I see. There is some dialogue between Jace and Plo Koon in Rendili about his actions during the war, and one might be able to make the assumption that A led to B, but it seems safer not to. Removed. Menkooroo (talk) 03:15, November 8, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

  • Hey everyone. I was the one who gave this guy the copy-edit, so I'll refrain from voting and take care of any objections you have. Menkooroo (talk) 04:06, August 21, 2012 (UTC)