Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/J'Quille

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J'Quille

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:24, April 9, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: When I started writing up this article I did not realise Tim Dry had written an entire book about it.

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Support

  1. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 16:42, June 11, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 00:38, October 30, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Awesome! - Pyke syndicate AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:35, February 7, 2017 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Thanks for your work on movie character articles! Imperators II(Talk) 19:14, September 26, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 18:02, October 9, 2017 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:47, January 15, 2018 (UTC)
  7. Nice work! - Cwedin(talk) 18:56, January 20, 2018 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:47, February 19, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Jorrel
  • "Early in the war, the Whipid witnessed the Sith Lord Darth Vader visiting Jabba in order to request the services of the Hutt's best bounty hunters, but was expelled from Jabba's throne room along with the rest of the court so that the pair could speak in private." - Reads a bit awkwardly. Maybe split into two sentences? JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 15:10, June 11, 2016 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Per FAN rule 9, this article cannot have any redlinks.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:57, October 4, 2016 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:03, October 4, 2016 (UTC)
      • It looks like another one was added since you fixed the earlier ones.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:37, November 6, 2016 (UTC)
        • Damn I was hoping someone else would do that before an objection was made. Oh well, after an entire Sunday morning 'tis done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:17, November 6, 2016 (UTC)
AV
  • According to Pablo, 100 Scenes is actually pre-Story Group; that source will have to be removed and the article updated to say the updated Char Encyclopedia was the first ID. - Pyke syndicate AV-6R7Crew Pit 14:41, February 7, 2017 (UTC)
    • My internet is finally fixed! And so is this article! Good times. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:13, February 7, 2017 (UTC)
Imperators II
  • The backup links for the Whiphid and Saelt-Marae DB entries need to be fixed.
    • Fixed them, although I can't get the id=bts field to work. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:13, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
      • That was because the functionality of including the "id" parameter in the backup link was not present in the DB template at the time. I tried adding it, but it still didn't work. :P Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • Any way to restore the "Sean Crawford's website" link? Imperators II(Talk) 16:27, August 31, 2017 (UTC)
    • Done and added the proper webcite template. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:13, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • Jabba's full name in the infobox can't be sourced to the ROTJ. I urge you to take this as an opportunity to double-check whether all the other proper names and terms in the article are properly referenced.
    • Fixed and checked through and everything looks good to me. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:31, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
      • I pipelinked the Alliance to the Rebel Alliance, I hope that's still supported by the referencing?
  • Vader's dating ref needs some more work. It needs thorough linking and some restructuring, since it awkwardly uses two clauses with "as" in the same sentence.
    • Changed it up a bit. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:31, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
      • OK, as I understand it from the note, the Galactic Atlas establishes a "no later than" date of 0 ABY for Vader's visit to Tatooine. The other thing needed, then, is a "no earlier than" date of 0 ABY for that visit. I take it that's established by Darth Vader 1 (btw, what kind of lame comic title and subtitle combination is Darth Vader 1: Vader? :P), but is the comic explicitly set in the year 0 ABY, or is just "after the Battle of Yavin"? If it's the latter, you should add a source in that explains what "0 ABY" means and therefore why everything happening after Battle of Yavin must be ABY. Imperators II(Talk) 10:58, September 5, 2017 (UTC)
        • Galactic Atlas, as our only actual source of dates also establishes that, which I've added in. God to I miss the far more regular official dating of events in Legends. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:18, September 5, 2017 (UTC)
          • Legends articles still need writing up, Ayre. :P Imperators II(Talk) 19:14, September 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • "The Rebels arrive" section needs an image. (Look at the article in the Oasis skin.)
    • Added 2. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:31, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
      • Nice! Can you please vary the captions of either the Vader pic or the Leia pic so that they're not so similar?
  • The ref for 4 ABY needs to be expanded into a note since it doesn't mention J'Quille... you know the drill.
  • In the intro you say Vader's visit happened "early in the war" but there's nothing in the article's body that supports this.
  • Unless it's stated in canon that J'Quille was also subjected to B'omarr's practices, I don't really see how the mention of those practices is relevant to the character. Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
    • It seems like important context for the order, but I've removed it for now. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:31, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • Please create a category for members of the B'omarr Order. Imperators II(Talk) 19:40, September 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • Please add {{Imagecat}}.
  • Did Vader ask for two specific bounty hunters or just the two of the best?
    • It actually isn't that clear. It cuts off before he actually asks Jabba, and then when the hunters show up Vader just says you're the best Jabba has to offer. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:34, September 25, 2017 (UTC)
      • Well, if it's just two dudes showing up and Vader saying they're the best, I don't really think you should say Vader asked specifically for "two of the best". For all we know, he just asked for bounty hunters. Imperators II(Talk) 19:51, September 25, 2017 (UTC)
  • Wouldn't "ordered the execution" be more appropriate than "demanded" (both in intro and article's body)?
  • Solo's profession is intro-exclusive. So is Chewbacca's status as Solo's companion. Imperators II(Talk) 10:58, September 5, 2017 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The intro is 369 words long, while the Bio is 787. That's 47% of the Bio's length. For an article this size, that's way too long of an intro. I'd suggest opening this article up in Oasis skin to get a better idea of what most of our readers are seeing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:46, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
    • Cut it down, is that enough? Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:53, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
      • It's good, but I'd probably recommend cutting out the part about being present for Vader, which isn't a major detail. That will make it easier to combine the rest of that paragraph with either the end of the first or the beginning of the last. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:23, September 17, 2017 (UTC)
  • I think it would be better for the infobox to use the Force Collection image of J'Quille as this article's main image. It's definitely a better profile picture of the character. The only issue is whether we can get a large enough version (250px minimum). Hopefully a tablet would give us higher resolution than a phone. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:32, October 14, 2017 (UTC)
    • Sadly I don't have access to a tablet, do you know any users who do? Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:18, October 15, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • "the Whiphid truly served as a spy for Lady Valarian, a rival of the Hutt with whom J'Quille had an affair." He had an affair with Jabba?
  • You use "J'Quille sat in one of the throne room's booths" and then in the next paragraph "J'Quille later sat in another of the throne room's booths", can we maybe have some rewording here?
  • Good job. I'm a big fan of the Bts. 1358 (Talk) 21:31, October 8, 2017 (UTC)
C'Wedin
  • Backup links are needed for the {{SW}} refs.
    • Not sure what's going on with that template at the moment. Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:10, January 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • The LG recommends using a scollbox when there are 40+ refs, so that can probably go. - Cwedin(talk) 09:02, January 20, 2018 (UTC)
    • Toprawa added the scroll box before supporting, so I feel as though we'd need to discuss it with him before removing it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:10, January 20, 2018 (UTC)
      • If Tope added it in, I think it can stay. - Cwedin(talk) 18:56, January 20, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:47, February 19, 2018 (UTC)

  • I could not find the ISBN for Tim Dry's book anywhere and I'm not sure one even exists since it's only an ebook. I've included the ASIN instead since I wasn't sure what to include, but if it needs removing then let me know. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:27, April 9, 2016 (UTC)