Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Invasion of Begeren

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Invasion of Begeren

(4 Inqs/4 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Plagueis327 (talk) 23:13, September 27, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 18:20, October 27, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:18, December 26, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 08:16, January 7, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:14, January 9, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Clean.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 22:25, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
  7. Winterz (talk) 21:16, February 12, 2013 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 22:49, February 12, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cade
  • Hey, Trayus, you didn't mention of any of the celebrations on Dromund Kaas. They devote a whole page to it. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 22:22, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
    • I've added a mention, although nothing in the comic states that they're actually celebrating the Begeren victory. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:59, November 25, 2012 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • To my knowledge, we only use † to indicate casualties of individuals, not necessarily units or anything else like starships, etc. The infobox can still list the destroyed units as "casualties," but I don't think † should be necessarily used.
  • Linking was a bit lacking in the infobox and intro. Please see what you can link in the rest of the article before I start reviewing the body. CC7567 (talk) 22:03, December 26, 2012 (UTC)
  • "Kel quickly slew the Governor's two guards through his expert use of the Force": any relevant Force power that can be linked here? (Telekinesis maybe? Not sure though.)
    • Done.
  • Just wanted to check: is there a source that identifies the Battle of Begeren by that name? If it's another source besides its first appearance, {{1stID}} should ideally be used somewhere. CC7567 (talk) 20:21, January 14, 2013 (UTC)
    • Actually, I don't know where Trayus got the "battle" part. It's called Invasion within the comic, and the Encyclopedia calls it the Invasion of Begeren, so it's been moved. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 22:20, February 12, 2013 (UTC)
Begeren
  • The intro mentions bombing runs, with an s, but the article proper only mentions a single bombing run. Can you match 'em up?
    • Multiple fighters, so I guess 'runs.' Fixed.
  • In "Appearances," wouldn't "mentioned in codex entry" be more accurate than "appears in codex entry" ? The BTS refers to them as mentions, FWIW.
    • I changed the {{Codex}} template, removing "Mentioned in."
  • Good job. Note my changes regarding capitalization per the MOS; wording like "the Commander" should always capitalize the title, as it's referring to the person him/herself and not the rank. Menkooroo (talk) 15:47, January 5, 2013 (UTC)

I don't usually review FANs, but when I do..

  • In the intro you refer to Aurek Battalion as Aurek Company, those are two different concepts and you should reword in order to correct it.
    • Handling this for Trayus on CC's request - done.
  • "Despite the apparent Republic victory, a group of Sith (...)", that assessment needs to be corrected. While the Sith Empire wasn't completely destroyed, the Republic triumph was clear, not apparent.
    • Done.
  • Still in the Prelude, can you please specify why was Teneb under punishment?
    • Done.
  • In the comics didn't Teneb remark the several fallen Republic soldiers around the wounded Maggot attributing their deaths to him? I may be confused though :s
    • Those were Imperials, actually, but he does say he killed a lot of enemies.
  • I know it's not very relevant to the article but can you mention the conditions of Tytonus' ultimate demise? If you know what I mean. ;)
  • Great reading, pretty solid. Good work. Winterz (talk) 12:26, February 5, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:49, February 12, 2013 (UTC)