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Inquisitorius Headquarters

  • Nominated by: Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:43, February 2, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Recently updating articles related to the Sith, saw this in an episode guide and just had a good feeling about it!

(1 Inqs/2 Users/3 Total)

(Votes required: 2 Inq vote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 1 Inq vote required to pass.)

Support

—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:47, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:15, March 15, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 18:24, January 7, 2019 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:11, January 9, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Tommy
  • I think there should be a little expansion on Dooku's arrival in AotC, with an earlier link to the solar sailer and the hangar bay.—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 19:08, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • Hangar is incorrectly spelled as "hanger", which is something you put clothes on (I've misspelled this myself many times).—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 19:08, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • Perhaps a short sentence at the end explaining that Vader succeeded in killing Jocasta Nu.—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 19:08, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'd like you to take a look at the links. Some more need to be added, such as hangar, and Great Jedi Purge is linked more than once in the history section. I fear this may be an issue with other links.—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:01, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • You can't have quotes in the main article text. Either add a new subheading to accommodate it or more it so it's under a pre-existing one.—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:01, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • I feel an imagecat in the appearances would be beneficial.—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:03, February 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • Perhaps a bit saying about the building's legends name in BTS?—Tommuskq Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 11:33, February 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • The old title is still used in the opening to the design section and in ref 1.
  • Please correct your image punctuation.
  • "where they were greeted by two Kallidahin servants who took Koth's captured newborn and the Grand Inquisitor." Please add some commas. At the moment it sounds like the Kallidahins took the grand inquisitor.
  • "when once there," This doesn't make sense.
  • "several members of the Inquisitors," This should either be "several members of the Inquisitorius" or "several of the Inquisitors".
  • On the page with Vader meditating, he appears to have an office in the tower. Please add this to the article.
    • The office appears several times in the series and looks to be in the Federal District, not in The Works.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:33, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Vader confronted the two and ignited his lightsaber.[10]" When? In the last panel we only see Vader's shadow. No lightsaber. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 12:49, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
    • Actually, the last panel does show him ignite his lightsaber, while the two Inquisitors appear to be shocked.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:33, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
      • How odd. Of all the online versions I've seen the last panel in the one this image is from, and only features a shadow of Vader's helmet. Oh well, I think we'll find out what happens next in issue 20 anyway. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 14:57, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
        • That's really weird. The next page has an advertisement and the subsequent has the final panel, which shows Vader igniting his saber while the two Inquisitors are surprised with a "To be continued…" at the bottom right corner of the page. I haven't found the last page anywhere online. I've talked to others and they haven't seen the page anywhere online either. I could send you a picture of my physical copy if you'd like.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:50, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
          • Don't worry, I believe you, although that is odd. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:55, August 9, 2018 (UTC)
  • The update and inuse tags have been there for far too long. Please do what you have to do and remove them. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 12:29, September 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • "The Inquisitorius Headquarters,[5] was a derelict skyscraper located in The Works, an industrial district on Coruscant,[2] the capital planet of the Galactic Republic[6] situated in the Core Worlds[7] during the Clone Wars.[2]" This makes it sound like Coruscant was in the core worlds only during the clone wars. Please rearrange. I'm also not so keen on you having a one sentence paragraph, so if you could add something else to in that'd be great, or otherwise just combine it.
  • "which had multiple access hatches that lifted upwards to open, and from one of the large fins extended a smaller secondary structure." The latter part of this sentence seems a bit out of place. Wouldn't it fit better when you discuss the other fins?
  • I think you should mention the size of the hangar, perhaps that it could accommodate a Solar sailer.
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:01, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
      • Okay, but be careful with your referencing. The fact that it could fit a gunship should be sourced to Sacrifice, not episode II.
  • "During the Clone Wars, the smaller extension was connected to the main building" Is this the "smaller secondary structure" mentioned earlier? If so they should be discussed earlier. You make it seem like this is a familiar element of the tower.
  • "which included the installation of a landing platform, a large central chamber,[4] a conference room,[9] and a leisure area.[5]" We don't actually know if all of these areas were new. It's more than likely we just hadn't seen them before. Please reword.
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:01, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
      • You still mention "After the tower was refurbished," despite no longer previously mentioning this refurbishment.
  • In this paragraph you also mention of the landing pad twice, which is unnecessary.
  • "to[2] an abandoned tower" please make it clear you are discussing this abandoned tower here.
  • Links should be upon their first mention in the article. I noticed hasn't been done for hangar, so please correct this and check for any others.
  • I think you can increase the size of some of the thumbnails as they're kinda hard to see at the moment. Of course it doesn't help most of them are dark but this should help.
  • We should be able to get at least a rough timeframe for the first paragraph of Breaking the Jedi Order.
    • Do you know what Star Wars: Galactic Atlas states of the Mission to Level 1325 or the Battle of Ringo Vinda?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:01, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
      • Nothing to do with dates --Lewisr (talk) 03:28, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
        • Lewis is right, no dates are mentioned in relation to those events. However, it does source Ahsoka leaving and RotS to 19 BBY so if you can find a source or timeline (perhaps the one on Starwars.com?) placing the mission between those two you can construct a manual ref note.
  • "By the closing stages of the Clone Wars[16] in 19 BBY,[11] Grand Master Yoda had embarked on a mission to Moraband in order to uncover the secrets of preserving one's consciousness after death, after Qui-Gon Jinn,[17] a Jedi Master who died[6] in 32 BBY,[11] was able to communicate with Yoda, guiding him through a journey to preserve his identify after death,[16] a journey which would lead Yoda to Moraband, the ancient homeworld of the Sith.[17] Yoda also hoped to finally uncover the identity of the Sith Lord who had been manipulating the Jedi[8] and had created the clone army for them.[18]" I think you should cut this down a bit, as this entire paragraph doesn't mention nor really has anything to do with the tower, as it just serves as context for the Sith ritual.
  • Could you say where Dooku was summoned to Coruscant from? Even if you just say space or on his ship.
  • Could we get some quotes for the latter inquisitor sections? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 22:36, February 2, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think you could say that it was "later known as the Inquisitorius Headquarters" for the design bit.
  • Your recent edits have introduced duplicate links. I hope you don't mind me saying this Vitus, but I must ask if your heart's really in this nom. I know we all forget things and that's fine, but I really shouldn't have to remind you about referencing all info and making duplicate links. For lack of a better word, your completion of these objections seems a bit half hearted. I'll happily apologise if you were just tried or whatever, and are fully invested in this nom, but just know that if we're making the effort to review this for you, we expect you to equal that effort. Sorry if this was a bit ranty I just wanted to put my thoughts across.
  • I suggest sub-sectioning Breaking the Jedi Order. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:54, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • Please refer to Forum:CT:Template:ID usage and use Template:ID for the sources. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 19:02, February 3, 2019 (UTC)
    • How's this?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 14:07, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
      • I believe some of those names were not "an abbreviation, alternate capitalization, nickname, or shortened version of its name" and so the template should be utilised. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 20:44, February 22, 2019 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Does "The" in "The Grand Inquisitor" needs to be capitalized in the intro?
  • In the year 22 BBY, following a duel between Count Dooku, leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems, and the Jedi in a hangar on Geonosis I think it would be a good idea to specify which Jedi we are talking about here.
  • Sidious was pleased at the news, as he had achieved another milestone in his plan to destroy the Jedi Order and rule the galaxy, soon stating that everything was going according to plan. Not sure if "soon" is needed here. Sounds weird to me, at least. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:28, March 14, 2018 (UTC)
Imperators abandoned tower? Coruscant abandoned Imperators?
  • Please get the missing backup links.
  • You should provide archival dates for the two instances of {{SWArchive}}, since the automatically generated backup links aren't working.
    • Could you help me out with this particular issue? I can't seem to correctly make it to display the archive link, I added the full archive link as a placeholder for now--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:38, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • What you should do is take the original, obsolete link and stick in here. Then browse through the archived versions of the page until you find one that works, copy the archival date from the resulting URL (you'll be looking for the YYYYMMDDHHMMSS part of the URL) and paste it into the |archivedate= field of the SWArchive template. It's exactly the same as how the Databank template works in the Sources section of this article. Imperators II(Talk) 15:48, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Category:Infoboxes with missing parameters.
    • Doesn't show up anymore--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:48, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Nevermind, it's showing again. Could this also be with one of the cite templates?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:51, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • No. Try reloading the infobox, i.e., going to the source page for the relevant infobox template and copying the template code to this article anew. Imperators II(Talk) 17:14, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Would it be possible for you to get audio files for the quotes? You could ask Ayrehead for help with the film quotes, at least.
  • Images should be below quotes.
  • Could you break up the longer paragraphs in "Breaking the Jedi Order" and "Imperial Era" into smaller ones? Remember articles have to be formatted for the Oasis skin now, and long paragraphs look really intimidating and unappealing to the reader in Oasis.
  • Please remove all duplicate links.
    • Done!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:06, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
      • Seven more links remaining. Imperators II(Talk) 06:49, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
        • How can I find them? I turned on the gadget for it but it doesn't highlight the duplicates--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Maybe it only works in Monobook? I can just tell the links to look for: "Clone Wars" in intro, "Works," "Coruscant," and "Galactic Empire" in "Bringing good news," "Works" in "Breaking the Jedi Order," and "19 BBY" and "Galactic Empire" in "Imperial Era." Imperators II(Talk) 07:00, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Okay, the BTS should be rewritten:
    • The first thing you should mention is that the tower was created for Ep II.
    • Then you should mention when it was first given its canonical name.
    • And only then you should describe the tower's first Legends appearance and history of naming.
    • You're using the tower's full name in every BTS sentence, which is extremely redundant. Please reword. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • Context for Episode II, and there's a missing comma in that sentence. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • Context for TCW. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • I fail to see how the tower's comic book debut is notable enough for a BTS mention. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • First sentence says the tower first appeared in the film, which directly contradicts the first sentence of the second paragraph saying it first appeared in the novelization. Please revise. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Now look at that sentence talking about the novel. Why does it end with a comma? Why do you use the full title of the film twice in such proximity? Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
    • For the "Sacrifice" part, you shouldn't lead with the fact that the tower appeared in yet another source—that's not notable. Start with the fact that the tower was first identified in the guide for the episode, for which you can then provide the necessary context. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • I don't know how exactly I can reword this. Do you mean to that I should state that it was identified in the Sacrifice guide before I mention that it appeared in the episode?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:56, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Yes. And you don't even need to mention it actually appeared in the episode. Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • Reworded. I still mentioned that it appeared in Sacrifice but if you think it's best to remove the mention just let me know--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:44, April 12, 2018 (UTC)
    • For the last sentence, the wording "The Coruscant abandoned tower also appeared in [...]" is ineffective and misleading about the fact's notability—if you look at the Legends page, the building appeared in a whole bunch of other sources other than the film and the novelization, but we're not going to list them all, are we? You should start off with the critical information, which is that the building was provided it's formal name in the book. Imperators II(Talk) 07:01, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Replace all instances of "during or prior" or any variations thereof with "by [date]".
  • Please clean up the quotes.
    • Make sure there are no spelling or grammar mistakes, and no extra spacing and such.
    • Write the quote attributions in a consistent manner, providing full names for the speakers in all instances.
    • Wherever possible, try to make do with just what the quotes say, instead of adding context in attribution. For example, in the "Breaking the Jedi Order" quote just noting the speakers is sufficient.
  • Why isn't {{Facebook}} used for reference 20? Imperators II(Talk) 09:31, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • Note that punctuation goes inside double quotes. Imperators II(Talk) 06:49, April 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • In ref 1, please provide a source for Dooku arriving at the tower after the Battle of Geonosis. Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • And reword the reference so that it's not using "we." Imperators II(Talk) 06:57, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Breaking the Jedi Order" and "Imperial Era" could use more images. Imperators II(Talk) 21:25, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • s "derilect" in Sources your typo or the listed source's? Imperators II(Talk) 21:25, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • That wasn't my addition, I'm assuming it's a typo--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:15, April 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • You should be more careful with your referencing. Currently ref 10 implies that Yoda traveled to Moraband after Qui-Gon communicated with him, which you source to Episode I. Also, ref 14 implies that Episode III reveals who founded the Inquisitorius. Imperators II(Talk) 17:08, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
    • I think I fixed the issue with ref 10, but I'm not sure how ref 14 implies what you say. Ref 14 is for Palpatine becoming Emperor and that he was Sidious, and ref 4 is that he created the Inquisitorius and all. Could you elaborate further on what needs to be fixed and how? Thanks!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:51, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
      • You can only use the ROTS ref for the description of what Sidious was, i.e., "publicly [...]." The rest of that sentence needs to be sourced to a source that says Sidious founded the Inquisitorius when he was Emperor. Also, the "now" in that sentence must go, and you can't actually source the fact that Qui-Gon died "a decade ago" to Episode I. Imperators II(Talk) 18:57, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
        • I'm really sorry, but I'm still confused about the Emperor/Inquisitorius part. If I change ref 14 to go after "publicly" instead of after "Empire", I would need a different source that states that he was the former Supreme Chancellor and became the Emperor, which Episode III establishes and is attributed to ref 14. The ref that he founded the Inquisitorius is attributed to the Darth Vader comic and is ref 4, so I'm not exactly sure what to do here, I'm kind of lost in terms of what should be changed in respects to that. Removed "now" and fixed Qui-Gon source.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:34, April 28, 2018 (UTC)
          • What you need to do is the following:
            • Reference "Darth Sidious" to a source that says Sidious founded the Inquisitorius (I'm guessing that's Dark Lord of the Sith 6),
            • "publicly the former Supreme Chancellor of the Galactic Republic Sheev Palpatine and subsequent Galactic Emperor of the Empire" can remain sourced to Episode III, and
            • "after the rise of the Galactic Empire and the destruction of the Jedi Order" should be referenced to a source that says Sidious founded the Inquisitorius following the establishment of the Empire and the eradication of the Jedi. Imperators II(Talk) 14:09, April 30, 2018 (UTC)
              • First step and second step can both be sourced to Dark Lord of the Sith 6. Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 14:18, April 30, 2018 (UTC)
  • Context for Coruscant and Geonosis. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Why do you only list the secret hangar, but not the ceremonial chamber, in the infobox? Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure whether you can actually reference the tower being "old" to Episode II. Decrepit/ruined, sure. Also, I would like for you to add some more detailed description of the tower's appearance, i.e., its general shape and its condition by 22 BBY. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:32, May 4, 2018 (UTC)
      • The 22 BBY, 19 BBY, and Empire info should be presented chronologically. Imperators II(Talk) 19:39, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Rearranged--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:58, May 14, 2018 (UTC)
          • I believe you now redundantly introduce the secret hangar twice in Description. Also it's no longer really clear as to where exactly is the ceremonial chamber located in - the main building? the smaller secondary structure? Imperators II(Talk) 07:34, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
            • Fixed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 12:55, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
              • As it is now, the part about the tower's "neglectful state" would serve as a nice bridge between the second and third paragraph of Description. Could you move it either to the end of the second one or the beginning of the third one? Imperators II(Talk) 19:04, July 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please eliminate all double referencing, referencing sentences or fragments thereof to single sources as necessary. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • The "Sacrifice" image isn't a perfect fit for the Episode II section. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
    • There was this file- File:Theworks.jpg which was similar to the TCW one but was from Episode II and looks like it has been deleted unfortunately. Added the image of the secret hangar from Episode II instead--Vitus InfinitusTalk 14:39, May 4, 2018 (UTC)
  • "which ignited the galaxy-wide Clone Wars" — this can't really be sourced to Episode II, since the film only shows the Battle of Geonosis and nothing else of the Clone Wars. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • "following a duel between Count Dooku, leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems, and the Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi, Anakin Skywalker, and Yoda in a hangar on Geonosis during the Battle of Geonosis, which ignited the galaxy-wide Clone Wars, Count Dooku, secretly the Sith Lord Darth Tyranus" — "Count Dooku" gets a bit repetitive here, please reword. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Once Dooku had arrived at the abandoned tower's hangar, he was greeted by his Sith Master, Darth Sidious, with Dooku informing his master that" — both "Dooku" and "master" gets a bit repetitive here, please rephrase. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • "his plan to destroy the Jedi Order and rule the galaxy" — I doubt this can be sourced to Episode II. Imperators II(Talk) 10:07, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please create a category for locations within the Works/The Works. Imperators II(Talk) 10:52, May 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • "as he believed that they would be much safer there with his master" — this makes it sound like Dooku specifically mentioned in the film that the plans would be safer in the abandoned tower. Imperators II(Talk) 19:39, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Duplicate links again. Imperators II(Talk) 19:04, July 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • Description: "that served as a secret retreat and storage for Sith artifacts" — firstly, this clause causes the already longish sentence it is in to be really run-on; secondly it feels out of place, with the rest of the section strictly talking about the location and layout of the building as opposed to its application (maybe put it in History instead?). Imperators II(Talk) 19:04, July 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • I think you should replace the infobox image with an image depicting the tower as it appeared during the Empire's reign, being refurbished and all. Imperators II(Talk) 14:37, October 18, 2018 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 01:18, March 10, 2019 (UTC)
    • The only outside image of the refurbished tower I can find that captures most of it is File:Vader 6 abandoned tower.png but there's not much difference in that depiction.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:07, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
      • That looks fine to me, just give it a narrower crop without the white margins. Imperators II(Talk) 13:14, November 27, 2018 (UTC)
        • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:25, December 11, 2018 (UTC)
          • By "narrower crop" I meant cropping out the caption and the speech bubble, and probably the shuttle, as well. The image is of large enough resolution to allow that, and those things will not distract from the article's subject in the image. Imperators II(Talk) 16:27, December 13, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Hunting rogue Inquisitors" is large enough a section to require some subsectioning. I'm noticing grammar mistakes, as well. Imperators II(Talk) 16:27, December 13, 2018 (UTC)
AV
  • The the name of the industrial zone that the tower was located, nor the fact that it was an industrial zone at all, cannot be sourced to AotC. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 15:39, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
  • Complete Locations 2016 has some additional information on the tower: "After Chancellor Palpatine's life is threatened by the rogue clone CT-5555, the medcenter is temporarily shuttered to bolster security. During this time, Sidious moves his collection of Sith artifacts from a dilapidated tower in The Works district, which he fears might be discovered by the Jedi." Said collection is moved to the Grand Republic Medical Facility. EDIT: The tower was also said to have served as a "retreat," and the medical facility replaced it in that capacity. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 15:53, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
  • After having viewed the article in the Oasis skin *shudders*, you should easily be able to slip some concept art into the Bts section. The TCW concept art from the episode guide could work, but you may want to track down someone with the AotC art book and see if it has anything on the tower. It may even go into the design ethos of the tower, which would be valuable for the Bts. The Imagecat could just be moved down as subsection or two. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 16:23, May 17, 2018 (UTC)
    • Concept image added, looking to see if there is additional info in the art book. Imagecat moved down--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:49, May 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • Have you checked for appearances in canon adaptation like Star Wars Journeys: Beginnings, The Prequel Trilogy Stories, or Star Wars: The Prequel Trilogy – A Graphic Novel? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 07:37, May 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • With the Databank calling the Inquistorious Headquaters both "unmarked" and "unidentified" at the time of the Clone Wars, I'm not sure wether we should be treating "Coruscant tower" as a proper IU name for the building during that era. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 00:08, October 30, 2018 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 21:36, March 5, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done--Vitus InfinitusTalk 02:04, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
      • Coruscant tower is still used in various locations within the article. Also, the fact that the building was unmarked by the time of the Clone Wars should be mentioned in the article. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:57, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Reviewing note: You don't need to keep empty parameters in citation templates. Just remove any unused ones. I've fixed it for you (at least some instances), but keep this in mind.
  • Regarding the use of "previously known as"—I feel like we should avoid using such ambiguous timeframes. You could say something like "known as Coruscant tower during <whatever>", but in a reference frame where everything happened a long time ago, "previously" just raises many questions.
  • The first intro sentence is a really long run-on. Please split it up.
  • You have two consecutive intro sentences that begin with "Sidious would". Please vary it up a bit.
  • When linking, please include the full name of the subject in the pipelink. What I mean is, upon the first mention of Darth Vader, you should do [[Anakin Skywalker|Darth Vader]] and then only link "Darth" in the next relevant mention. 1358 (Talk) 20:03, September 30, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done, will look for more instances of this and continue to correct if necessary--Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:07, October 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • Right now Fall of the Republic and Age of the Empire are intro-exclusive. I'm not sure how much they really add to the article so you might as well get rid of them.
  • "a dark side organization of Jedi hunters tasked with eliminating remaining Jedi after their destruction." I feel like this context should be placed where the Inquisitorius are initially mentioned. 1358 (Talk) 20:05, October 29, 2018 (UTC)
Fan
  • "After a mission to Level 1325 to capture rogue clone trooper CT-5555 after he allegedly attacked Supreme Chancellor Palpatine of the Republic, secretly Sidious, the Grand Republic Medical Facility was temporarily shut down to increase its security." This should be reworded a little. Fan26 (Talk) 02:24, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Vader, after encountering and capturing Nu, killed her after discovering that she possessed a memory crystal with the names of Force-sensitive children, and stating to Vader that Sidious would use that list to eventually replace him." I think this should be reworded to clarify it was Jocasta who was talking to Vader. Fan26 (Talk) 15:05, November 12, 2018 (UTC)
Anil
  • Is it Sidious' or Sidious's, because you use both versions in the article. As canon sources use both of them, I suggest you go with Sidious's, as the name ends in an "S" sound. This is encouraged per the Manuel of Style. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Clone Wars should be linked in the intro. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • In the first paragraph of the intro, I think saying "dark side ritual" would be better than "dark side of the Force ritual." TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Also in the same sentence, I think you should briefly mention that the Sith's attempt failed. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Brief context for Vader in the intro's second paragraph, please. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • In the same paragraph, two consecutive sentences begin with "after," please see if you can change that. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • I believe Vader's Mustafar stuff is irrelevant to this article. What do you think? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Inquisitorius should be linked in the Design section. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • "which could accommodate a vehicle[2] such as an LAAT/i gunship[8]" I mean, visually, a LAAT would clearly fit there, but I don't think it should be mentioned since that occured in a vision. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • "In the year 22 BBY,[11] Count Dooku, leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems and secretly the Sith Lord Darth Tyranus, engaged in a duel against the Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi, Anakin Skywalker, and Yoda[2] on the Outer Rim[7] world of Geonosis during the opening battle[2] of the galaxy-wide Clone Wars against the Galactic Republic." In my opinion, this sentence is a little hard to read, so please see if you can split it. Or you can cut th context for Clone Wars as you explain it in the following paragraph. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • "In 19 BBY,[16] the Grand Republic Medical Facility was temporarily shut down to increase security after a mission to Level 1325 to capture rogue clone trooper CT-5555 after he allegedly attacked Supreme Chancellor Palpatine, secretly Sidious. During the lockdown, Sidious transported his collection of Sith artifacts from the abandoned tower to the medical facility, due to concerns that the Jedi may discover the tower." Are you sure that it is not the other way around? I don't have Complete Locations, so I can't check.TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • "By the closing stages of the Clone Wars[17]" How exactly does "Voices" suggest that it took place during the closing stages of the war? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • In the last sentence of that paragraph, I think it would be nice to mention that Yoda/the Jedi had learned that it was Sidious "who had created the clone army for them." TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Some of the image captions lack a period per Forum:CT:Punctuation in image captions. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Force-bond lacks a dash in "The vision." TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • There is another mention of the word "clone" before the one that is pipelinked to Cloning. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Shuttle should be linked. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • "Sidious ended the ritual, ending the spiritual plane they were on," Could you please change one of the "end"s to something else? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • I don't think it is necessary to say that Sidious was publicly known as Palpatine in "A new purpose," since you explain that in an earlier paragraph. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • I believe that the last paragraph of "A new purpose" is completely irrelevant to this article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • We have an article those two Kallidahins, the Nursemaids. It should be linked somewhere in that paragraph. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • I remember that in an issue, Vader cut arms of several Inquisitors during training, and one of them was being treated. If that occured in the tower, I think it should be mentioned somewhere in the article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • I get some play-by-play-ish vibes while reading certain parts of the article. This usually happens when there are multiple successive sentences that simply summarize the dialog like in the "Exposing the Inquisitors" section. Please take a look through the text and see if you can put more emphasis on actions, rather than conversations. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • Again, I believe the section "Chasing the Inquisitors" contains too much detail that is not relevant to this article. I think just saying the outcome of the chase, and the Emperor's decision to move the Inquisitorius should be enough. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
  • The first sentence of BTS lacks reference. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:49, February 23, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

  • I will be on vacation and thus unavailable between May 31st to June 18th. I will not be able to address objections during that time as I will have no effective means of doing so. I will be taking care of all raised objections between now to the 31st, thank you for understanding.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:48, May 19, 2018 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Objections from Anil unaddressed for over two weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:19, March 10, 2019 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 01:20, March 10, 2019 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 01:20, March 10, 2019 (UTC)