Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Hidden Ones

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Hidden Ones

  • Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol (We seed the stars) 21:13, March 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Finally, the long-awaited conclusion to JujiggumProject: the Hidden Ones has arrived! <insert maniacal laughter here>

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:31, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 03:13, March 31, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 20:26, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Grunny (talk) 08:08, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Very nice job. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:50, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Floydle:
    • "otherwise they would risk exposing the existence of the sect to the galaxy—and such exposure would negate the sect's goal. " How? Also, I would likely you to split that sentence into two parts; it would work better that way and wouldn't mess up the flow.
    • Intro: Why did the Skywalkers begin sowing dissent among the Hidden Ones? Clarify.
    • Is there an article for the battle between Ziil and Luke? If so, please link it.
      • You'll find it's already linked sufficiently. Once in the intro: "This enraged Ziil, who confronted the elder Skywalker" and once in the body: "Ziil, deeply angered by the unrest, attacked Luke". I'll get to the rest asap. Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol (We seed the stars) 23:51, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
        • Whoops. Guess I missed it.
    • That's it. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:48, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
  2. At least it'll be the last :P
    • "restoring their will to be live": could you check this? "Live" isn't an adjective.
      • Bah, should just be "to live." Fixed.
    • Can you clarify Ziil's rise to the Hidden One earlier (and directly) instead of leaving it unexplained and revealing it later in the body? Could you also mention the members by 43.5 ABY before you start talking about the Skywalkers, as it's a bit more chronological and proper that way?
      • Addressed.
    • Last one: does the singular "Hidden One" exist, as part of the sect (not the leader)? If it does, then the article needs to be moved there, per the naming policy. If not, don't bother. A very good read otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 23:54, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
      • Checked through Outcast, and couldn't find any place where it was used in that capacity. Thanks, and thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol (We seed the stars) 00:10, March 31, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:50, May 6, 2010 (UTC)