Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Goran Beviin

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Goran Beviin

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 02:55, 17 September 2008 (UTC)

• Nomination comments: Resurrecting WookieeProject Legacy.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. A good read, IFYLOFD. There goes my thoughts of one day FA'ing this :P Greyman^(Talk) 09:17, 29 September 2008 (UTC)
2. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 20:17, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
3. I think I've picked all the nits I'm qualified to pick. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 21:51, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
4. Jinzler 22:02, 6 October 2008 (UTC) --Great work
5. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:10, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
6. Objections resolved on IRC. Cull Tremayne 01:09, 10 October 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

1. I think that the introduction paragraph should be expanded, as it is kinda short at the moment --Jinzler 17:43, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Expanded. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:04, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
2. Preliminaries from Graestan the Cruel:
   • Sectioning is overdone in the bio.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 22:44, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Broken ref (number four).
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:18, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Unsourced statements in the BtS.
     • Addressed.IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 22:44, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Graestan^(Talk) 22:33, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
3. From the palace of Chack Jadson:
   • Longer intro.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:18, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • No quotes in the middle of a paragraph.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 22:48, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • It needs to be categorized.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 22:52, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Haven't read it, so consider these preliminaries. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:44, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
   • I think you could expand on the fact that he is gay. Maybe just a little, so that when you read "married his husband" it's not so shocking and random. Perhaps you could get a bit in P&T, but make sure it's not OR. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:06, 19 September 2008 (UTC)]
     • Addressed. I put it in the P&T. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:54, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
4. From the Undisclosed Location of Darth Culator:
   • Colloquial language. I fixed a bit of it, but there's more. "Looking to," "unfroze," possibly more. I just skimmed it.
   • [Redacted by administration] -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 11:22, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
     • Ha ha. Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:10, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Not really an objection as such, since we don't have a policy on such things, but given the number of species assimilated by the Borg Mandalorians and given his unique relationship status, it would probably be good to specify that he's a "human male Mandalorian commando" in the intro.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:45, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Calling the Vong "alien" in the intro is a bit biased to the humanocentric POV. "Extragalactic" or similar would be better.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:45, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Having Mandalore the planet right next to Mandalore the title creates a bit of confusion without additional context. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 22:22, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 23:49, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
       • I was referring more to the intro. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 04:18, 21 September 2008 (UTC)
         • Okey doke. Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 04:23, 21 September 2008 (UTC)
5. Chack has a few things:
   • Don't refer to them as Vong. Yuuzhan Vong.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 16:52, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Is there an article for the invasion of Helska IV?
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 16:52, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
   • Good work. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 15:45, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
6. From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
   • Intro: "He was one of Boba Fett's most trusted lieutenants, and was often called upon to be interim Mandalore while Fett was away." Often? I only saw one time mentioned in the article.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:40, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Settled down: "He relayed this to Boba Fett on Taris, along with news about Fett's family; Fett's daughter, Ailyn Vel, was alive, working under the name Ailyn Habuur." Bit of context on why Fett thought she wasn't alive, please.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:47, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Settled down: "During his short time in charge, Beviin mostly stayed home, shoveling dung and running his farm." When did he get a farm? If we don't know for sure, you could mention it in early life, like "at some point they got a farm". Only less lame.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:40, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
       • You forgot to add a reference for the introduction of the farm. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:21, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
         • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 00:14, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Personality and traits mentions them adopting several children. The article only specifically mentions one adoption, otherwise just saying they started a family. Mention the other adoptions somewhere in the biography, maybe under early life.
     • Couldn't really find anything on any other Beviin children, so removed "several children" phrase. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 20:55, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
       • In which case, you should probably remove the bit about starting a family from early life, since they didn't adopt until later. You also mention the children on the farm, which raises the question who the other children are. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:21, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
         • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 00:14, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Working for the Yuuzhan Vong says they were ambushed by a fleet, but after just refers to a single ship. Could do with some clarifying.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 21:00, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
   • There's a few sentences starting "in 40 ABY". You could change one or more to something like "later that year" or "that same year".
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 21:03, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Medrit is referred to as his husband. Is the word "husband" used in a canon source? Otherwise it would probably be more appropriate to use "partner".
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 21:03, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
       • You still use "husband" in a couple of places. If the marriage isn't specifically mentioned in a canon source, we can only say that they're a couple. I know Karen Traviss has said that it's a same-sex marriage, but until it's stated we can't assume that. You could, however, expand BTS to explain it a bit more and mention her comment, rather than just linking to it in the reference. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:21, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
         • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 00:14, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
           • I still think the BTS needs expanding a little to mention that Traviss has said they're married, even if it hasn't been stated in canon yet. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 18:05, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
             • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 19:50, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
   • Behind the scenes could use some brief expansion. Who created him and what did he first appear in? It would lead on nicely to where his name came from.
     • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 21:07, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
   • That's all. Otherwise, nice article on a character I never knew existed. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:07, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Random stats: 1620 words. Word cloud. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 11:22, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

1. • • Dangit! Can't view. Stupid laptop. :P IFYLOFD ^{(There is no death. There is the Force.)} 00:00, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
       • Hey, IFYLOFD, I suggest letting Jinzler know that the intro has been expanded by posting something on his talk page if you haven't already. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 18:52, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:09, 10 October 2008 (UTC)