Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Force phantom

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Force phantom

  • Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Saturday, May 7, 2011, 03:04 UTC 03:04, May 7, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Why, look, Father, Mother's performing a new trick. […] Mummy? Mummy?

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Pre-nom reviewed. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:22, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Very nice. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 15:57, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Really good stuff! Both the article and its subject. Allston's additions to LOTF were by far the best. Menkooroo 12:59, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 06:03, July 2, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Do you want an AC vote? :P Kilson(Let's have a chat) 01:30, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
  6. –Tm_T (Talk) 06:09, July 11, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Moffship
  • "The secret of their creation was coveted by many during that same time..." - This statement, from the intro, implies that others aside from the One Sith sought to learn the technique, which isn't supported by the body of the article. If this cannot be sourced, please remove it.
    • Addressed--Added a bit about Jacen's desire to learn it, and Alema's desire to learn was already self-implied.
      • I just feel that the "many" is a bit deceptive - perhaps you could replace it with "those aware of the phantoms," or something similar?
        • I hear you, check it out now.—Tommy 9281 Wednesday, June 1, 2011, 11:39 UTC
  • "...young Skywalker and Jedi Knight Nelani Dinn were beleaguered by a multitude of mynock phantoms in the bowels of the asteroid [...] including one of Darth Vectivus himself that appeared only to Jedi Dinn..." - It's been a while since I read Betrayal, but I'm pretty sure Vectivus didn't appear as a mynock phantom. Please rephrase if this is the case.
    • Addressed.
  • I thought I had one more objection, but I guess I don't. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 01:12, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review, my friend. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Wednesday, June 1, 2011, 01:25 UTC
Attack of the Clone
  • Just one: what do you mean by "phenomena way"? The prose here gets a little too colorful, so it's unclear. CC7567 (talk) 01:47, July 2, 2011 (UTC)
    • Typo. Addressed, thanks for the review CC. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Saturday, July 2, 2011, 03:15 UTC

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 06:11, July 11, 2011 (UTC)