Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Elassar Targon

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Elassar Targon

• Nominated By: Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 06:11, 29 June 2008 (UTC)
• Nomination Comments: Master of the universe reporting for duty!

(5 Inq/0 User/5 Total)

Support

1. These Wraiths are a fun bunch! Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 23:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
2. My favorite Wraith. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:54, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
3. Greyman^(Talk) 15:31, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
4. I'd like to see those redlinks cleared up, but I'll support it nonetheless. Jaina Solo^(Talk) 22:52, 10 July 2008 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:25, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Yarg, genius!
   • No need to specify he was a pilot in the intro (after saying he joined the Wraiths).
     • Given that they don't always fly starfighters, I prefer to leave it there, but removed, I suppose. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • I'd suggest calling Zsinj "Warlord" on the first mention, not the third.
     • Done; that's an easy fix. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • Not a fan of calling Coruscant the throneworld.
     • It's called that IU, but nevertheless, reworded. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • I think it might also be a good idea to link "occupied" to Battle of Coruscant (YVW). Up to you though.
     • Made so. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • "Targon adopted a swashbuckling pose and attitude and his actions convinced Janson and other pilots that he belonged in the unit." Might want to separate this into two sentences or change the phrasing.
     • Minor tweaks made. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • I thought we didn’t refer to them as Vong in articles. Please tell me if I’m mistaken.
     • We don't, and I shouldn't have. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • Present tense in the last paragraph in the Bio.
     • Typo, that. Meant to type a d. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 23:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
   • Good. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 19:50, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
2. Toprawa:
   • I'd like to see some mention in his intro of him being Wraith Eleven. After doing so, please link and kill the resulting red link
   • I am unclear who you are referring to here. Targon or Tainer? Please replace "He" with the appropriate name: "He emerged from the engagement without damage" Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:00, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:25, 11 July 2008 (UTC)